Reviews for magnetic collision
D. Cowman chapter 1 . 9/13/2011
"magnetic antics"

I like how that reads. Like, a lot.
classic violet chapter 1 . 6/13/2011
I love how science intertwines in the poem. I love the second & third stanazs.I especially love how it ends. Perfect.
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 1/10/2011
I liked the first stanza by itself. It's a great description, but I honestly didn't get how it connected to the rest of the piece... how is protecting you related to attracting? And rust didn't seem related to the whole magnet/electric thing.

I really liked the second two stanzas. The way you worked in all the scientific terminology was really great. It created a great image.

I like the contrast in the last two stanzas with the drama versus scientist. It's a great contrast, but the only thing is that I felt like the science should come first just as a better way to connect it to the previous stanzas. Meaning starting with "let me be the scientist" and then saying 'cause "you're a natural at dramatics." I just think it would flow better that way.
Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 12/16/2010
Past Io and Ganymede,

Beyond Pluto’s arc,

Where Helios no longer pulls,

& Solar flux merges with universe,

There and only there,

Does stray neutrino—

All alone—still travel straight.
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 12/15/2010
Really enjoyed the subtle rhyming here, and the strength of your narration. Keep up the good work.

Much love,