Reviews for Conditional
Highway Unicorn chapter 1 . 8/24/2012
I really, really, really like your repition of the "If, and, but." It really helped up the whole theme and flow on this piece.

The ironic twist at the end was brilliant. She spent her whole life working hard, doing what others said, and probably thinking she was making it in the real world. And to have the social worker say "welcome to the real world" probably sent a punch to Janet.

Yes, this may be a sad outcome for Janet, but this was a well crafted piece, and I love how you sent a powerful message via a few amount of words :D