|Reviews for Scaffolding and Dreams|
| the prophet apathetic chapter 1 . 12/27/2010
I think your style has definitely matured since the years I was frequenting this site. I personally thought your structure was just fine but you know me, I think you should do whatever you please. To me the flow is just right and carries your passion through to the reader. My only crticism: don't apologize for your art ) you have nothing to be sorry for.
| Noir Schist chapter 1 . 12/25/2010
Ah, something about the style is sort of off-putting. I guess I'm the type who ardently sticks to regularity, hence why I don't like the long lines jutting out in the middle of normal lines. For me, it disturbs the rhythm. D: (Who knows? Maybe my sense of rhythm sucks.)
Still, I loved the metaphors and the gloomy tone describing the 'evilness' of NY (hehe). The last line - "I want a city that sleeps." - was lovely. I loved it; it left such a huge impact. The poem's still very nice because it carries your unique expressiveness, just like your other works.
| Ivan Shorn chapter 1 . 12/22/2010
I enjoyed this, very well written and an honest portrayal :]