|Reviews for Celestial|
| electrical moon chapter 1 . 10/14/2011
This is a very moving poem and easy to relate to. Brava!
| SmashedIce.X chapter 1 . 6/10/2011
Ooh, this is good, highly relatable! :)
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 2/6/2011
"flop its belly into the pavement, into/a single swan-dive".. The belly thing made me think it was belly-flopping which is not at all a swan dive. In a swan dive your belly wouldn't be what hits... that confused me.
In that last couplet I think as semi-colon at the end of the first line would be good 'cause they are each sentences, but I think connecting them with that is better than a period which would separate them too much.
I loved the personification of a poem here. I think anyone who writes poetry can understand how much weight poems carry for the person who writes them and I think you showed that well.
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| nickyO chapter 1 . 12/26/2010
The last two lines are very powerful.
| the sun softly smiles chapter 1 . 12/24/2010
the ending - so lovely.
although I do think you mean "taut" as opposed to "taught" in the second line of the second stanza :)