What a great short story.

I really enjoyed reading it.

Oh my dog, this is wonderful. I love workplace romance. And workers.

This story was really, really great :D

Oh, Jesse. *hearts in eyes* I forget, sometimes, why I love your writing so very much - if it's been a while since I've re-read anything, if I've been bogged down and frustrated in RL, I do forget.

And then I read something you've written again, and it's love at first sight all over again. I think it's the honesty, the real-life possibilities of these things happening, that gets to me. This is like taking a peak at the lives of two messed-up guys who still make it work in the end. It was a perfect delight to read, as always.

this was almost unbearably sweet (and i mean that in the best way possible). and even though i was betting on a happy ending, my heart broke when they finally had their break-up discussion because it seemed so bleak. but all the little broken, angsty bits melted and reformed at the end there, so it's all back to normal.

seriously, you're consistently one of my favorite authors and i wish you were actually a slash-writing gumball machine, so that i could have more on demand. obviously, i realize you're not, but i'm still always happy to see something new.

I love this.

That was adorable! I loved your description of the restaurant and why Scott had to leave. I really liked that neither Dane or Scott gave up their respective dreams for the other, but instead found a way to live their lives together while still pursuing those dreams.

This was beautifully written. Well done!

I love this and you and this and you and... yeah.

On the other hand, I wasn't entranced by the flashbacks. I kinda didn't feel like they gave any information or elaboration that I needed as a reader? There was more than enough depth and emotion in the normal text to create the backround imagery from the italicized sections. With the extremely important exception of the very last flashback which references the scene from within the story ("We were going to get our own restaurant...") and includes further elaboration of Scott's feelings, because that flashback was perfectly spot on and beautiful! I think maybe the other flashbacks would be more effective if they were more concise, or more directly related to the immediate scene...

Oh, man.

I love getting the emails that tell me you've written something else. It's like Christmas.

This was great- As someone who works in a kitchen most nights, i can very much understand why Scott got out. And the way you can have a pseudo relationship without seeing people outside of work. And the boys! I liked how they love each other, but that doesn't mean either of them are willing to let go of themselves and what they need. It was brilliant.

Thanks for putting it up here.

Aww, that's sweet. Would that it could always work out like this when life gets in the way.

One little nitpick, though- at factory jobs, they most certainly do make you come in on your day off.

this was perfect, so sweet and mellow, the pacing was just right, with the perfect dose of drama to make it interesting.

Lovely!

Is it wierd to say reading this was hilarious to me ? The marrying you in my head bit made me laugh for so hard. The interaction between Scott and Dane was very really, which is not something you see a lot on fp. I'm just glad they sorted everything out in the end and lastly you're an amazing writer.

oh my, will you continue? it was very nice :D

Great, now I have to go to family dinner and I'm all weepy. Thanks for that. Beautiful prose as always. This one has a nice sparse extreme control thing going on that I can never pull off. And I love a little food foreplay. Nom nom nom...

That was sad and sweet and excellent. I never really know what to say with your stuff, because there are so many good things about it. I think I love your characters most of all, though, and how quickly you can make the reader feel like they know them and care about them.