Reviews for Metaphysical
Mourningstar13 chapter 1 . 1/8/2011
that must have been hard to write. I'm having a bit of trouble understanding it, but I can tell it's good writing. Keep writing!

mourningstar13
Siren-esque chapter 1 . 1/6/2011
I loved the imagery conjured up in this piece. Very powerful. The style is also very hard to pull off, yet you managed to do it quite well. Made me feel the work, even though I know little of the facts behind it.

Perhaps you could have used punctuation more effectively? It's especially evident in the first stanza, and was a bit distracting.
Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 1/4/2011
Very difficult form and structure to use, but you've done well here in making it visual and complex enough for the reader to not even notice the structure. I like "Dalliances of desert bluebirds", something about that just shines in text. Good write. MD:77.
fatbird33 chapter 1 . 1/2/2011
wow a pantoum, they're super difficult to write, but you did really well! powerful imagery :)