Reviews for Jack in the Box
4 the dragonhearted girl chapter 1 . 5/7/2011
Very cleverly written
SargentLooneyPencil chapter 2 . 5/6/2011
wow.. very detailed work... i feel like i'm there, watching it all happen... love it! want it mpre
Poisoned Twinkles chapter 1 . 3/7/2011
Creepy. But I find it quite hard to understand the first line after the 'stagger back' part. And maybe you could've put a line break between "I can see your breath" and "it's so heavy", or cut either into a phrase.

The end is 'beautiful'. I hope you could make a longer version or some sort of sequel. I thought it was a little too short because I still want to read more about it. :O