Oh my goodness, this was cute, and funny, and wonderful. Rhyan and Zyric meeting... I can't wait for more! Baisyl could teach an acting class, mad skills there. I love reading every chapter, they just seem to end so quickly! Can't wait for the next installment!

Awesome!

Interesting development on the Rhyan front. There were moments there when I shipped him and Zyric, for some reason.

Baisyl's a cute flirt, though when I first realized he was going to flirt with the guy, I got an uneasy feeling in my stomach. You know, 'cause of Bai's situation and all. But, it worked out fine. And of course, Kedean's jealous!

P.S - Your birthday present from me? Got any suggestions? Your bday is coming up soon.

Great chapter!

Great story!

Awesome!

I expected that the prophecy would be a point of worry for Baisyl. After all, if it came true, he'd be pregnant and yeah... I get the impression that he doesn't what to be. And Kedean's worried because his own brother will die... Very complex, I like it.

Great chapter!

Great story!

I am in love with this story...Uodate soon

I really love this story. The dialogue is definitely what stands out to me, but also the characters. I think I like all of them... and they're all so in depth and seem to be well thought out. You definitely have a real talent, and I'm so glad I found this story! There's just enough mystery, action, romance, and general confusion to make a perfect mix, and to cause some serious intrigue. I've loved every chapter so far and have had the hardest time breaking myself away from it to actual do the real life things that need to get taken care of. :) Keep up the great work, and I can't wait for your next update!

I absolutely love your dialogue. It's definitely some of the most realistic (and amusing) that I've seen. Definitely well done and I think the setup for the story is good too. I just stumbled upon this today, but I am definitely excited about reading the next 15 chapters. Good beginning!

Wow, another great chapter. And a cliffhanger to boot! Is Rhyan ok?

Mele is awesome. I love the way you're entwining multiple storylines here and bringing them all together. I just wish there was more already ;)

If this was a finished book I expect it'd be one I'd not be able to put down.

Another wonderful chapter, tho I'm a bit confused on a couple things. But Im sure it'll all be cleared up later on. My only complaint, there wasn't enough BaisylxKedean in it. I look forward to you next update. *hint, hint* Keep up the fabulous work. _

Awesome!

Valen's chilling. I totally loved Mel saving the girl, and this chapter has increased my curiosity about how Bai got into his predicament, I now think that the witch wanted him as a sex slave or something. After all, Al and Rhy couldn't fathom her reasons, at all. :D XD

Great chapter!

Great story!

You finally updated. I feel like I've been waiting forever. I just LOVE those two. They're so adorable. Nice cliffy. I'm actually looking forward to seeing Baisyl drunk. I think it'll be an amusing sight. In other words, update? Pretty please? *gives you adorable, irresitable puppy dog eyes*

Awesome!

I love how majestic Baisyl was in Kedean's eyes. It reminds me of many quotes about the Doctor from Doctor Who. All that power, comparable to fire and planets, and just... wow. Some people have the authority and power of Time Lords contained within their beings, even though they definitely aren't Time Lords. Anyway, wonderful elaboration on the magic of this world. I really have a sense of what it feels. Though I might like or lust after quite a few people, there's this feeling that you're the one and this magic is a manifestation of that concept.

I'm totally on Baisyl's side about pregnancy. I do not want to get pregnant, ever, and yeah... sex with men is not something I'll ever be having, for several reasons. So yeah... Kedean gotta learn self-control, even though the last line, often used when things are about to go wrong on FOP, indicates that Baisyl will get knocked up.

Great chapter!

Great story!

"What could possibly go wrong?" The magic words :)

Awesome!

The semen-like food is amusing. Also, it seems that middle names can function like first names for the Merseilles family. Also, I love how the fairy tale paralleled their relationship, causing Baisyl to become invested in it and worry about the ending. That's some threat Bai made at the end of the chapter, even if he couldn't actually accomplish it. Morally ambiguous characters are so complex, awesome and yeah... As always, he's my fave character here!

Great chapter!

Great story!

Oh, what a cliffhanger! You have me on the edge of my seat to read more! I'm enjoying the story a lot. Thanks for writing!

Haha love your last A/N for chapter 13. This story is so exciting and great and though I don't care much for Heterosexual couples in fiction, I'm quite taken with Baisyl as both male and female! Though of course I'm hoping Kedean sticks with the lovey dovey with boy Baisyl only...o It's so exciting though and the characters are all quite lovely!

So glad they both got some lovin in this chapter! Whoo! I can't wait to read more and I look forward to an update! Your writing is so wonderful and fluent! Wordy but in a lovely and insightful way! I can only hope things end well for the men ;o;