Awesome!

I love how this chapter showed Kedean and Baisyl's love for each other. Saving each other, accepting each other even though Baisyl wasn't who Kedean thought he was, caring about each other above all else, having all those feelings for each other... That's love, this is a love story and this is the chapter where it really sinks in. These two love each other, and would always love each other, regardless of anything.

Great chapter!

Great story!

WOAH and the plot just became even more badass.

I really like the developing relationship between Kedean and Baisyl, and the complexities of the political drama. :D And Kedean's prophecy!

Awesome!

You know, I think the prophecy is true. Well, one part of it has come true, definitely. Baisyl's so awesome. I was sad that he became male again, since his femaleness was part of the major draw and drive of the story for me, with the situations and social commentary it created. Well, at least, there's still Kedean trying to understand what the heck Baisyl is after learning of his true gender. Also, the scene where he was almost raped was a powerful one, one of commentary on how women tended to get treated and real emotions. You're amazing, do you know that? Exploring gender changes and how society treats women... I love that!

Great chapter!

Great story!

I'm LOVING this! You absolutely MUST update soon or I swear I will go insane. If you've killed Baisil (sp) I'll cry. T.T. It would've been so cute if he had been able to collect on his bet with Kedean. Please update again and I promise to review every chapter, deal? ;)

Wow, this is really good. Well written, both gramatically and in terms of vocabulary choice, with an interesting plot. While it's not unique, you've chosen some of the tropes I tend to look for, and the characters are interesting and multi-dimensional.

Your writing is quite wordy, but not bad, you paint vivid pictures with your words, and you show rather than tell, which is always good.

The story is fast paced, which hinders slightly the development of any characters other than the main ones, but it's interesting and I want to find out where it's going, so I don't hold that against you.

I'm really looking forward to the next chapter, at the moment there's still alot that's unclear, other than that Baisyl is half dragon, and turns into a man when he gets rained on, and Kedean is definitely going to hook up with him at some point. It may be because it's 1am and I am exhausted that I've missed some things. I may come back for a reread later on. Thanks for the great read!

Update update UPDATE! Please update! I have to see what happens. I HAVE to. Come on, I'm having a rough week and I need something to life my spirits a little. And update would be VERY nice.

Yes, I finally got an account and can't wait to see you on dA and/or FFN again.

Awesome!

I like that both Baisyl and Kedean don't think of each other as their type. As always, I really like the girls, particularly Baisyl. She really is, like, the best character in this story. Her personality is of a type that I like, her situation highlights the inequalities of gender that used to or still exist, she has red hair and yeah... She's awesome.

Great chapter!

Great story!

Dear lord, I would abhor it if I found myself in that situation. Even though I am a girl, I absolutely hate gender roles. If I was born in surrounding where women were more restricted, I might have gone on a homicidal spree.

Aw, Baisyl and Rhyan have such a sweet relationship! I like them both very much. Myles, obviously, is a dick. :/ I hope he's not a large part of the story!

Anyway. I like the way you introduced both of the main characters. You were able to get away with a good deal of back story, without it seeming forced, or boring. It all flowed in a nice, natural way. Great job! :)

Awesome!

I like Fern. The eels are absolutely chilling. The insight into Baisyl is awesome.

Also, please go on dA! I've made you fanart for Three Wishes a few weeks ago and I miss you a lot. Yeah, a whole lot. Please come back to dA and FFN!

Great chapter!

Great story!

Lol, the part about the eels made me think about the eels in Princess Bride, except much gorier. Oh Kedean. :D He's my type of man.

There's nothing sexier than a confident woman-er...man.

:D

Awesome!

I like how this has really got Baisyl and Kedean's dynamic. They are so tense around each other, making the air spark with energy. Also, Baisyl's so awesome! Out of the two, she's my favorite in all ways. Yeah, I like tricky characters better than honest heroes, and prefer red hair to muscled chests.

Great chapter!

Great story!

Excellent opening! First off, I'm incredibly jealous of you ability to write fight scenes and have them come off as fluid and smooth. I can't do that for the life of me. :P

I can't quite put my finger on it, but something really sucked me into this story. It wasn't like some stories on this site, where yeah, it's nice, but you're aware it's an amateur work. With your story I felt more like I was reading a published work! I could really picture everything that was going on, and it was a very enjoyable opening. :) Great job!

Awesome!

Considering that you've been away from dA for 5 days, this is very reassuring. Your writing style is wondeful, as always. I love how you explore Baisyl's feelings about the various aspects of being a woman. It's fascinating! Also, I'm one of the likely few people that consider Baisyl hotter than Kaeden.

Great chapter!

Great story!