Reviews for The Fall of the House of Veadra
Francesca chapter 13 . 4/25/2011
Wait, plothole, weren't her organs like deteriorating and she was going to die in two weeks? So how did she manage to have a baby with Malcolm? Good story though overall, it was a pleasant read
Typo chapter 8 . 4/22/2011
"Astra had disliked Marcus from the start; that hatred would triple once she knew he had arranged Lisette's death" I think you meant to say Harold instead of Marcus. More in depth review will come once I finish your story, just thought I should point that Part out now
J. C. Hunter chapter 13 . 3/16/2011
Bollocks. I hoped she would survive by some miracle. Blah. His dedication to the baby Julie makes me think of one of those historical romances where he'll fall in love with her when she grows up. I know it's not possible but it's a disturbing image. Lol.
summers-end chapter 12 . 3/12/2011
Ah, I'm sorry but this seems like a very abrupt ending! You built up the story very well with subtle development from chapter to chapter and this ending...it's the opposite of that!

I thought you would do more with Astra to be honest-it always seemed like we were being prepped for her entrance-that she was the true heroine and Juliana only a supporting character.

And Harry's death just seemed too easy! He's always been wary of Astra so how does he believe her when she says she'll go along with his plan?

And we don't even know if Juliana lives or not! It's great that she and Marcus get together but now I'm more invested than ever in whether she lives or not!

And an Astra that was described as a tomboy, who likes fighting, etc...would she really think up a plan that involved her seducing Howard on her own?

Sorry I'm being so picky but I really liked this story and I guess I just wanted it to go on a little longer :/

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Kura-sama chapter 9 . 2/20/2011
I'm praying that it's Astra showing up unexpectedly and not Harold~
summers-end chapter 9 . 2/19/2011
It's Astra isn't it? YES! We need her. LOVE the whole paralysis thing, way for Juliana to show some spine (or more of it really). Also, I've decided you're not really going to let her die. She and Marcus wouldn't be such a priority in a chapter if you were setting her up to die. At least...that's what I'm hoping.

Update soon!

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TouchOfChaos chapter 9 . 2/18/2011
sounds interesting so far.

don't screw it up.

ahahaha. omg sorry, i sounded mean...

anyway, update soon.
summers-end chapter 8 . 2/3/2011
First a couple of mistakes: I think you meant "murderer at the helm", not "murdered". Also, a few lines below that, when Juliana is laughing, it says "Astra and Marcus" instead of Harold.

This guy is lousy but he's smart. His plan is pretty solid. Except that he thinks women are weak and submissive and THAT will be his downfall. I like that. It speaks to the feminist in me. :)

Update soon!

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summers-end chapter 7 . 1/28/2011
Oh that's even better! Yay! The bloody tissue of Juliana just totally freaked me out as to how real her sickness may be which super concerns me because I really, REALLY like her and Marcus already and seriously want to kill Harold myself. Why couldn't it have been poison?

I can't believe how fast you update. I am seriously in love with you.

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summers-end chapter 6 . 1/27/2011
Sorry I haven't reviewed before now. No excuse except lazyness. But this chapter's end had me thinking so furiously I had to voice my ideas.

I'm seriously hoping that Carol doesn't trust Marcus and wrote the same letter to Decoster that Juliana just did. Because otherwise, that SUCKS. Serious betrayal right there. And it makes me wonder about Juliana's sickness, if maybe it wasn't poison or something. In which case, that wouldn't have anything to do with Harold but another enemy? Who got to Carol? Ohh, this just gets better and better. Can't wait for Astra's story and journey (or whenever she just shows up at the palace)! I keep feeling like all this stuff is a prologue in some sense to Astra's introduction, as if she's the true heroine of the story. If it's both of them, are you eventually going to start alternating between the sisters? If it's not, I would not recommend mentioning Astra with such hope so often in these early chapters. I keep feeling like she's going to be the perfect solution to all these problems and if that's not the case, I'm going to be severely disappointed. And intrigued.

Update soon!

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Le Meg chapter 5 . 1/21/2011
Haha, you go old grinning guard. Those kids. ;p
decadebydecade chapter 5 . 1/20/2011
I like Marcus a lot! Although this goes against my feminist ways, Juliana should let Marcus have a go at Harold. This does not, however, mean that I'm opposed to Juliana killing the turd. In fact, that would be way better.
decadebydecade chapter 4 . 1/20/2011
I had planned on only reading one chapter tonight, but then you ended it like that...and well...
runtransatlantic chapter 1 . 1/19/2011
I stumbled upon this story somehow-I don't exactly remember, but I have to say, it's really captured my attention. I will he leaving long reviews in the future. (I am currently reading in my bed under the covers, so this first review is coming at you via iPod, which isn't the best option). Still, I felt the need to mention that you do indeed have another reader, and you'll hear from me again!
Victoria Stokes chapter 1 . 1/17/2011
wow, i didn't see that coming. at all. my mouth dropped open haha. that was awesome. good job and excellent end to the first chapter.
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