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Naw this chapter was good and I look forward to your longer chapters :-D

oh and HAPPY BIRTHDAY! for ya know, when it is.

haha my favourite's definitely gotta be john XD

he's really annoying but you can tell immediately that he has a sister complex XD

and seriously, unless you give thomas this "i was possesed and tormented you against my will when i was in love with you this whole time" story, (except more realistic, of course) i do not allow her to end up with him. absolutely not

I think Isabella is my favorite character because she's so determines. I have a feeling that although it will take a while, she'll definitely achieve her goal and maybe even get the guy!

haha That's really funny. I totally wasn't expecting the last few lines.

Nice work!

My only comment is that this chapter is seemingly similar to the last one. I feel like all the different "talks" could be combined into one chapter. That's your choice though. It's just that when they're separate the flow of the story is different.

I like this chapter but it's a little confusing. I mean, how does he throw her onto his back when she's 300 lbs?

Wow, that's a really big decision for Isabella. I hope it works out for her. Guess I'll find out in the next chapter! :)

It's interesting to see two points of view! I hope Izzy gets happier. haha

I don't know what the original chapter was like but I do like this rewrite. The dialogue is very believable between Isabella and Amanda. You introduced a lot of characters at once but you also described them really well which is good. :)

I don't think you need to start by saying it is Isabella's pov as that becomes clear from what the narrator says.

I found this chapter didn't gel so well, possibly because if the way you add descriptions in all of a sudden, such as where she describes the living room- the number of chairs etc. Maybe you could rejig it such as saying that she found the all white decor oppressive that night or something so it doesn't feel as though it is just information for the sake of it.

I think you should have her mother needing a lot more convincing to give her a tutor, she caved in very easily.

Interesting cliffhanger though.

Thumbs up for rewrites woot woot! Lol anyways I know I haven't been reviewing much but great chappies! :)

PLEASE CONTINUE THE STORY I LOVE IT SOO MUCH!

A trainer in a trainer, and i do think he has a girlfriend. Over protective brother, lol.

Well Alex Seems Nice :) i Dont Know Why But After Reading This Chapter, i Just imagined that One Day Isabella And Alex Would Be Out Excercising, then Jason will Run into Them, And Then The Story Could Move On ;) Unless Yuv Got Someone Else Ready For Isabella? Update soon :)