Wow, that is one really deep poem. I love how you used your words. It's very emotional if you ask me. Overall i give it a 8.5/10. I like how you created imagery in or minds, almost as if we could feel the pain this person is feeling, and what they are going through. Excellenty written :) Continue to do your best!

p.s, this is how i actually review strangers stories, i decided i wanted you to see this other "me" and how i review xD

:) Professionally done :)

CONTINUE TO WRITE. :)

Hey there, Jenny here :D

I like this, it's so sad!

You're so good at writing this stuff :) I can't believe you deleted the other one D:

~rosesecret02

great usage of line breaks, it gives it an amazing pace. Keep it up :)

Wow, congrats on your first story. It's really good. Keep writing and welcome to FictionPress!