|Reviews for Knell of Existence|
| Do Play With Fire chapter 1 . 8/5/2012
This is fairly interesting so far.
| Danzi chapter 1 . 2/8/2011
An interesting start to a story, it does make me want to read on. I think there is real potential here to make this a great story,it just needs a read through and a bit of a touch up, there are some typo's but we all have them, its things like
"Created in front of them in an instant, was a mound of padding leading to a car. They fell on the mound of padding" I wouldnt think that mentioning the mound of padding twice was necessary. There's also "There had been plenty of strange people coming to his door before, but none had attacked him or broken into his apartment" That seems a bit redundant to me. I may be wrong, it may be how you want to say it, that's fine, its just what i picked up on. That being said there are some great parts too. I particularly liked "It was not the laugh of a man who had found happiness, but that of a man who had seen the worst of the world." Was a great line, so keep up with it!