I actually went and googled Never B Bored . . . In any event it was compelling and simplistic at the same time, and by simplistic I mean to the point. and enjoyable read that has an easy cadence.

well you had me googling never b bored just in case, it sounded great (though dangerous, lol) There is a facebook site...

I noticed a couple of typos: "we are working on a new inititive,", "it expanded the usefulness and effacacy"

"they enter their locaion", but they didn't mar the reading at all. You've got a great opening, a strong narrative voice, and an interesting concept: i think the structure could be tightened a little, and maybe a few more concrete examples given? and consider bringing the lovely wife back in again at the end (e.g. bring in something from teh wife's timeline to indicate how much time had passed?) to round it off nicely :)

Thanks for a great read!

Interesting story. I wasn't sure at first why all these details about the site development were being listed off. It didn't seem related to the cute scene at the beginning, so for a while I was expecting the wife to pop in again. The ending tied it all together well but I think it would be nice to maybe have her show up once or twice in the middle of the story. Right now, the information is rather dense and having her step in and ask how it's going (maybe have a running gag be that he always says he needs ten more minutes?) would be a fun way to break that up.

Other than that, I really liked the bit at the beginning with his wife. The dialogue and actions all seemed realistic. I could picture this scene playing out and it drew me in.

Interesting story. I like how you went through the process of the website's creation as well as the opposition it faced. It was very clear that you had thought out the entire process. That made it easy for the reader to follow the story.

What I think could be improved on are the descriptions. I understand that the story was mostly about the creation of Never B. Bored but, I feel like more emotion and description of the characters could really add to the story. It would help the readers relate more to the narrator and sympathize with the problems he faces. It would become less dry and more realistic.

Otherwise, interesting premise. With a little fleshing out the story could be great. Keep up the good writing.

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