|Reviews for the destination|
| knownkonvict chapter 1 . 1/19/2011
You could take out a lot of unnecessary adjectives (i.e "the") and don't really need the "I".
I really like the last three lines in the second stanza. Good work
| cab fed hig chapter 1 . 1/18/2011
i think the rhythm's fine, honestly. this is beautiful.