|Reviews for When Lambs Become Lions|
| Mother LePlume chapter 5 . 7/23/2014
I enjoy reading your stories at night before I go to bed. They help me forget my issues of the day so I can sleep. Therefore, it was this story I was thinking about as I drifted off. I confess I cannot see proud Oulia going away so easily, without husband or son. the answer to her removal might lie in the story behind how she was chosen to be his wife. Whose idea was it? Did she have some other young man that she was secretly in love with?
| Lady of the Western Forest chapter 6 . 3/19/2011
I really wish I had read this earlier, because it's really, really good! Then again, this way I didn't have to wait for updates...
There were a couple of off-points, but I can't really... Say where... The budding romance is somewhat lacking. You can clearly feel it, but it's not as much there as I feel it should be... Methinks...
Also that the opening line is never taken up on, led up to, yes, but it doesn't reappear, what context is it in? It's... Missing and free-floating. The timeline is somewhat off, with several months, actually.
I loved the ending, seeing Areli matured by motherhood and the lovers making good on their promise to visit the lars... (Is that right? It appears to be a minuscule.)
| Aylia chapter 6 . 1/25/2011
great job! i like how you started and ended with the same line. though i do wish this sotry had been longer...
| Aylia chapter 5 . 1/23/2011
aw! I didn't think this would be so short!
| Aylia chapter 4 . 1/22/2011
I have to say...I absoulutly LOVE this story! Keep up the great work!
| Aiarada Alyan chapter 1 . 1/20/2011
Good work! You have great characterization - one of the strongest points of this story is how you describe the characters. Your descriptions are succinct, and the reader can start feeling sympathy towards them immediately, which is good. I also applaud how you keep a fairly consistent voice throughout the story, and I like how your names coexist with each other, to create a feel for the culture and language of this place. Also, great job creating interest for the reader - because the characters have distinct personalities, it is fun to see how they interact with each other, and it'll be exciting to see what happens next!