Reviews for The Guide For Guys
Elaina McKenzie Sharpe chapter 1 . 10/27/2011
Lol. This sounds like it will be incredibly funny. I think This will go on my favorites list now. It's very interesting and I can't wait to see what happens with this guide!
AutumnMTC chapter 24 . 8/21/2011
Okay.

FUCK YOU.

This story was wonderful and awesome and full of fantastic stuff that made me laugh, cry, and go eat a sandwich while jamming to Owl City. And I effing hate Owl City. That's how awesome this was. BUT CANCER? AND THAT ENDING OF TEAR JERKING SHIT? FUCK YOU, WOMAN. YOU MADE ME CRY LIKE A HORMONAL NICHOLAS SPARKS FANGIRL. FUCK. YOU.

Off to my favourite stories list, you go...
Open your eyes Chopstick chapter 1 . 7/26/2011
Hey, so here's the review you asked for. Since you asked for more character development and flow, I'll mostly stick to that. Though, I might add some other things u might want to look at (just wont be in too much details) as I read through. Take what you want from it. :)

Look at:

-your punctuation. Dialogue tags.

-megan tells her to write down what she just said in the beggining. You don't have to repeat it as she writes it down. It drags the story.

-flow was a bit off. Everything lead one thing to another, but everything felt a bit forced. Like you were thinking "ok this happens and right after this happens" there was no concrete flow/connection to one point to the next.

-the characters seems a bit flat, but perhaps thats more because we're still learning about them. the dialogue works because all of it seemed necessary to keep the story going. We learn a lot about the characters personality that way as well. I'm waiting to see if there's more of a round out development. I understand the gits of their relationships between each other though and i have a feeling i know how this would turn out just based on what's already written. Predicatable, but then, you had a really good hook. Right amount of urgency and you could really take this turn of events any way you want and highten the suspense even more. Good. :)

if i have time I'll continue reading. Once chapter isnt enough to tell you much about character development, but i'd have to do that next time, when im not pushing for time. Hoped i helped though!
Twistedin2Delusions chapter 24 . 7/8/2011
NEVER BEEN SO UTTERLLY MAD! I literally cried and my mom was no help at all by saying it's just a book. I mean I know it is but still... that's sad stuff! you did amazing in your writing... gonna catch some zzzz's now so ill read the sequel when I wake up...
Lady of romance world88 chapter 24 . 6/1/2011
Hi. It's beautiful chapter and I love it. :) I am so glad that Michelle and Desmond finally admit that they love each other. Yay! :D Its true thats cancer have no cures and its risks for people eg for women have cancer and must use chemio thats will suffer the baby if a woman's pregnant with a child. Its sad. :( I am hoping thats will be hopes and miracles for Desmond to have long life as least. *hopeful smile* I am hoping that Michelle and Desmond make positive things together to treasure the memories together. - xxxx. I am glad that Desmond and Michelle will meet up for next day. Yay! :D Aww poor Michelle. :( I understand why Michelle's parents don't tell her because they knew that Desmond will tell her when the time's right. :) Aww Michelle want to take the photos of Desmond and herself so she can have plenty of memories of being together. Yay! :D OMG! I am wonder what happen to Desmond and his mum? *curiously* And where they go to? *curiously* Oh no! Please don't let Desmond die. :( I am glad that Michelle went to hospital and met Sarah there so they can pray together for hopes and miracles. *hopeful smile* I am sorry to hear that Sarah's husband got leukembia and I am hoping there will be another chance for him to live bit longer. *hopeful smile* I am hoping that the prayers will be answers for the ones should live bit longer. *hopeful smile* OMG Desmond will be live one more year. Oh no. Thats not fair. :( I am hoping that will be hopes and miracles for Desmond to live bit longer so he can deserve it to have his dreams many things to come true. *hopeful smile* I am hoping that Michelle'll be there for Desmond always. *hopeful smile* It's amazing chapter and I am enjoy read this story. I love it. Keep writing and don't stop writing. :D This story remind me of a novel that call, 'Walk to Remembering' by Nicholas Spark and the movie that call, 'Haunting House in Connidicut' :)
Lady of romance world88 chapter 23 . 5/31/2011
Hi. It's so beautiful chapter and I love it. :) This chapter made me cried. :( Aww Desmond and Michelle kiss each other few times. How cute. Yay! :D Aww Desmond and Michelle fell asleep together. How cute. :D Aww Desmond's observation gentleman. How cute. :) Aww Michelle staring at Desmond's body and admire at his body too. How cute. :) I am glad that Desmond drove Michelle home and explain the whole story to her parents. Yay! :D I am wonder why Desmond change so quickly whenever he's around Michelle? *curiously* I am glad that Michelle's parents are very supportive and understanding parents. Yay! :D I am glad that Michelle went back to the treehouse that belong to her and Desmond's secret place to explore when they were little. How cute. :D I am wonder why Michelle never return the treehouse after Lilly's death? *curiously* Is it because of Desmond? *curiously* I never knew that Desmond have a diary. And I never heard a man kept a diary or see one because men usually kept a poems or stories notebooks thats all. Wow! Desmond is very interesting young man. :D Aww Desmond wrote it about Michelle in his diary. Thats so cute. :D I am glad that Michelle ask that question to Desmond. Yay! :D Aww I understand why Desmond always teased, provoked and angrily to Michelle because she remind of Lilly since Lilly's death. Poor Michelle and Desmond. :( OMG Desmond have cancer since he was six and he hiding the secret from Michelle all along until now. Why? *curiously* I am so glad that Michelle and Desmond kissed as they admit their feelings for each other. Yay! :D Hope that Desmond'll be survive it and married Michelle then have children together in the future. *hopeful smile* It's amazing chapter and I am enjoy read this story. I love it. I am taking break now and I will read the rest of this story and the sequel of this story plus three of yours as well. :D By the way, I hope that you will read the rest of my story and thank you so much for increasing my reviews. Thats so sweet of you. And hope that you'll enjoy read my story whenever you have time. :D
Lady of romance world88 chapter 22 . 5/31/2011
Hi. It's so beautiful chapter and I love it. :) This chapter is my favourite and I just fell love with Desmond. :D OMG Michelle's dress is so stunning and gorgeous young teenager girl in love. :) Aww Desmond is spy on Casey. He must be watch out for Casey. I am wonder why Desmond do that for? *curiously* What does Desmond meant by, 'Casey hit with ladies?' *curiously* Does that meant Casey is playerboy or womanizer? *curiously* I am glad that Casey gave Michelle the favourite flowers and have photos together. Yay! :D I am wonder why Casey is so nervous about it? *curiously* I am wonder what Casey meant by, 'Michelle's parents always being supportive if anything happen'? *curiously* Aww Desmond's watch out for Michelle. How cute. :) I am so glad that Desmond danced with the blonde young woman so he can be closer to Michelle who's danced with Casey. :) I am glad that Casey went off to get the drink for Michelle. Thats so sweet of him. :) I am wonder how does Amber and Michelle met? *curiously* I am glad that Amber point out to Michelle where Casey's doing. Poor Michelle. :( OMG Casey's dating Megan as well. :( Since when? *curiously* Does Megan ask Casey out from Drew's party? *curiously* Or after the break up between Megan and Desmond that sent Megan to hospital? *curiously* OMG Megan must have ask Casey to use Michelle to play with the game. Poor Michelle. :( How dare Megan took Casey away from Michelle. What bitch Megan's and I can't believe that Casey fell for Megan instead. Why her? *curiously* OMG It break my heart to see Michelle cried and ran away from the school. Poor Michelle. :( I am glad that Desmond's there to comfort Michelle and took her to the beach. Yay! :D Aww Desmond and Michelle are so cute together. Hope that they will be item in the end. *hopeful smile* It's amazing chapter and I am enjoy read this story. I love it. I am off to read the next chapter now. :)
Lady of romance world88 chapter 21 . 5/30/2011
Hi. It's so beautiful chapter and I love it. :) What does Michelle meant by 'Desmond's her key'? *curiously* Why Casey lied to Michelle about the party? *curiously* I hate people lied to people when it's obvious that it will hurt them most than the truth. :( I am wonder what Casey hiding from Michelle? *curiously* I am glad that Michelle agree to go the prom with Casey. Yay! :D I am wonder why can't Desmond told Michelle the truth last night? *curiously* Aww Desmond's in love with Michelle. How cute. :) I am hoping that Michelle'll realises the true colour of the man and will find out who's her prince who's stood front of her nose all along. :D I am so glad that Desmond'll go the prom for Michelle to protect her. Yay! :D Is that why Desmond witness that he saw that something he dislikes that happen at the party and he's afraid that Michelle saw it? Is that Desmond took her home before she saw it herself? *curiously* I am wonder what will Michelle wear for the prom? I am wonder what will Desmond and Casey wear for the prom? *curiously* It's amazing chapter and I am enjoy read this story. I love it. I am off to read the next chapter now. :)
Lady of romance world88 chapter 20 . 5/30/2011
Hi. It's so beautiful chapter and I love it. :) I am so curious and fall in love with this story since I became so closer to your characters in this story as friend. :D I am wonder why Desmond want to believe it from Michelle's mouth? *curiously* I notice that Desmond mention his mum. I am wonder what happen to his dad? *curiously* I am so glad that Desmond really want to be with Michelle. Yay! :D I am wonder how long does Desmond have crush on her? *curiously* I am so glad that Desmond and Michelle share a bed together. Yay! :D Aww Michelle have dreams about Desmond. How cute. :D I am wonder why Desmond kept a photos of Lilly since she's died? *curiously* I am glad that Desmond told the half of the story to Michelle the truth. Yay! :D OMG Drew put the alcohol in the Michelle's drink. Poor Michelle. :( I am wonder when'll Desmond admit his feelings for Michelle? *curiously* I am wonder why Michelle won't ask any more questions at all? *curiously* I am hoping that I'll find out what bother Casey and why he's afraid of Desmond. :S I am glad that Desmond's the wonderful guy for Michelle and hoping that they'll be together forever. :D It's amazing chapter and I am enjoy read this story. I love it. :) I am taking break now and definitely will read the rest of your story and the sequel of this story tomorrow. :D
Lady of romance world88 chapter 19 . 5/29/2011
Hi. It's so beautiful chapter and I love it. :) This chapter made me change the point of view about Casey's attitude and behaviour. I have bad feeling that something about him that I won't like it. :( I am wonder why Michelle felt bad about the party that something going happen to her? *curiously* I am so glad that Michelle told whole story to Casey about the diary and Drew's party. Yay! :D I am wonder why Casey's not happy about it? *curiously* What's Casey hiding from? *curiously* I am glad that Casey come home and comfort Michelle. Yay! :D I am wonder if Casey tell truth that he's love Michelle? *curiously* I am so glad that Casey confront Desmond and made him that they can go with Michelle to Drew's party. Yay! :D Let me guess that Drew is 18 or over 18? *curiously* I am wonder how does Desmond met Drew? *curiously* I am wonder why Desmond always refuse to date girls that Drew set him up with? *curiously* I am wonder why Drew is staring at Michelle to make her so creep of him? *curiously* OMG Drew's drunk and no wonder he's playerboy. Poor Michelle. :( Aww Desmond protect Michelle by dancing with her. Yay! :D OMG Drew want to dancing with Michelle and want her to drink it. Poor Michelle. :( I am wonder where's Casey? How come he's not protect her? *curiously* OMG Drew force Michelle to drink it. Poor Michelle. :( I am wonder what does Drew gave her? Is it alcohol? *curiously* I am so glad that Desmond's there to protect Michelle. Yay! :D OMG Drew gave a date rape to Michelle. No wonder Desmond punch Drew in the jaw. Poor Desmond. :( I am wonder why Desmond want to take Michelle home? I am wonder why Casey's afraid of Desmond? I am wonder what's Desmond's reaction that Michelle like him? *curiously* I am glad that Desmond took Michelle home. Yay! :D It's amazing chapter and I am enjoy read this story. I love it. I am taking break now and I will read the rest of your story tomorrow because I will be out to watch the movie with my siblings soon. :)
Lady of romance world88 chapter 18 . 5/29/2011
Hi. It's beautiful chapter and I love it. :) Aww Casey treat Michelle like she's only girl in the world and angel to him. He's so amazing guy in the world. :) OMG Is Michelle fall for Casey? *curiously* Let me tell you that love is just happen and its easily to take that path to be happy and in love. :D I was in love once few years ago so I don't regret what I done and I always treasure it in my heart because my love was the first. :) Michelle deserve to be happy and in love. Thats nothing wrong to be in love because sometimes in relationship can be bad lead the painful breakup and the person who's in love can learn the mistakes pain from that. It can be sad and hurt. No one's perfect in the world. :( OMG Michelle is more hot than before. Thats means a positive thing about her. :) OMG Desmond ask Michelle to be his date to Drew's party. I am wonder why? *curiously* OMG Does Desmond read the guide? And why? *curiously* OMG How does Desmond knew that Michelle wrote positive thing about him? *gasped* I am wonder why Michelle agree and pretend to be Desmond's girlfriend to party? *curiously* I am wonder why Michelle hate party so much? *curiously* I am wonder what will Casey's reaction to be? *curiously* It's amazing chapter and I am enjoy read this story. I love it. I am off to read the next chapter now. :)
Lady of romance world88 chapter 17 . 5/29/2011
Hi. It's so beautiful chapter and I love it. :) I know that I already told that I definitely will be busily all day unfortunately the plans change because of weather at the moment so I went home earlier after college. Thats means I can read this story for awhile. Yay! :D By the way, about the movie - It still on tonight. Yay! :D This is my favourite chapter that include Casey. Yay! :D I am wonder if Casey's dad name is Steven or Jerry? *curiously* Because I am so confused by that. :S OMG Casey's dad thought that Casey and Michelle are dating. How cute. :) Poor Casey and Michelle. :( Aww I am so glad that Casey admit his feelings to Michelle. Yay! :D What does Casey meant that girls dislike him? *curiously* I am glad that Casey and Michelle kiss each other twice in this chapter. Yay! :D Aww Casey bought a gift for Michelle and he ask her out. Yay! :D OMG He bought her a expensive bracelet. She's so so lucky girl in the world. :D I am wonder how does Casey afford it? *curiously* I am so glad that Casey made Michelle so happily in the world. :D I wish I have a boyfriend like him. *dreamily smile* I am wonder why Desmond hate Michelle and Casey so much? *curiously* I am wonder what's plans that Desmond have in his mind for them? *curiously* OMG Desmond's smirk and thats means that he's up to something. I am wonder what is it? *curiously* I am hoping its not bad. *worried* It's amazing chapter and I am enjoy read this story. I love it. I am off to read the next chapter now. :)
Lady of romance world88 chapter 16 . 5/29/2011
Hi. It's beautiful chaptes and I love it. :) I was plan to read this chapter and leave a review in this story before I go to bed so I'm sorry about that so I just notice that you stop read my story because you don't leave any reviews yesterday so Does I upset you? Or something? *curiously* Don't hesitaste to ask me anything. :) By the way, no you don't offend about the christians because I'm very strong christian and very open mind young woman. :) This chapter is my favourite and its including Casey. :D I do like Desmond but I love Casey because Casey's the type of ideal boyfriend/husband in every women's mind to search for serious relationship. :D Aww Michelle felt so comfort and happy after Casey hug her. How cute. :) So Casey and Michelle met at high school since freshman. How cute. :) Aww Casey asked Michelle to watch dvds at his house and she accept it. Yay! How cute. :) I am wonder why Michelle's gasped about Mustang? *curiously* I love pirates of caribeans and I am going to watch the number 4 with my siblings tonight. Yay! :D I don't know that Michelle loves sci - fictions movies and its so awesome because I never seen alot of girls watch the movies thats include sci - fiction movies. :) I am not say that Michelle have to watch the romance, etc and I am glad that she's not ashamed to be admit it. Thats why I love Michelle like a sister to me. :D I like Casey's mum and its funny because she's similiar to Michelle's mum as well. :) I am glad that Michelle agree to stay to have dinner with Casey and his family. Yay! :D I am wonder if Casey's only child? *curiously* Aww Casey and Michelle sit together as they watch the movie. How cute. :) I am glad that Casey gave Michelle his number so she can contect him whenever she felt so down. Yay! :D OMG Casey and Michelle almost kiss. Arrgh. I wish that they should have. :( I am glad that Michelle's very open mind person and accept to pray it before she eat the dinner while she's enjoy talk with Casey and his family. Yay! :D It's amazing chapter and I am enjoy read this story. I love it. I am taking break now and I'll read the rest of your story tomorrow because I'll be busy all day. And I am sorry. :( So I am hoping that you will read my storx when you have time please. Thanks. :) *hugs* mwa xo.
Lady of romance world88 chapter 15 . 5/29/2011
Hi. It's so beautiful chapter and I love it. :) I am wonder why Michelle's parents never ask why and what happen to Michelle that send her to hospital? *curiously* I am just wonder what kind of jobs does Michelle's parents work as? *curiously* I am wonder why Michelle don't tell the teacher that she's here at school? *curiously* I am wonder why Desmond's so mean and tease at Michelle at school? *curiously* Poor Michelle. :( I am glad that Michelle done flip up to Desmond. Yay! :DI am wonder why Casey told teacher that Michelle's here? *curiously* Aww Casey and Michelle pass the notes between them. How cute. :) Aww Casey's so caring and so kind teenager boy. :) I am wonder when does Michelle got emotional problems? *curiously* OMG How does the teacher knew that Michelle pass the notes to Casey? *curiously* Thats so scary. :( OMG The teacher read the notes what Michelle and Casey wrote it. How dare the teacher do that to them and should have keep the nose out of their private so the teacher should kept continue the class that students are interesting. I hate people don't respect for other people's private. :( I understand why Michelle scream and its teacher's fault that it interfere into her private life. Poor Michelle. :( I am glad that Casey stood up for Michelle and save her ass from sent her to detention. Yay! :D Aww Casey is sit down with Michelle at lunch time and chat with her as he listen to her. He's the ideal boyfriend that Michelle need and it make her happy. :) It's amazing chapter and I am glad that I enjoy read this story. I love it. I am off to read the next chapter now. :)
Lady of romance world88 chapter 14 . 5/29/2011
Hi. It's so beautiful chapter and I love it. :) This chapter make me so confusing and I don't know if Michelle's dream is real or not. :S What happen to her? Is it because of her head that causing her so weird? *curiously* OMG Michelle scream to the nurse that Desmond hurt her. Poor Desmond. :( Aww Desmond's the one who save Michelle. Yay! :D I am glad that Desmond's there to comfort Michelle and say apologise to her. Yay! How cute. :) OMG Daisy are same flower in the Michelle's dream. Poor Michelle. :( No wonder it freak Michelle out and its scary. :( It's amazing chapter and I am enjoy read this story. I love it and I am off to read the next chapter now. :)
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