I love the way Desmond was being so nice to her, and the way he cleaned up her face and everything, because it's just so nice and sweet of him! :)

I liked the memory, and also the way that the thing that stood out was that he'd called her by her first name, because that kinda pointed out to me the fact that he always seemed to call her "Evans", and never "Michelle", so obviously it must mean a lot when he does do it. :)

I also thought it was funny the way she fell asleep in the bathroom and ended up missing class. :P

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I didn't like the fight between Megan and Michelle because it didn't seem nice for them to fight. :(

It also seems kinda weird, they were best friends and obviously very close in the first couple of chapters, and now they're all distant from each other and mad at each other.

I liked the memory bit at the end, because it was so sweet and cute, especially Lilly. :P

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I loved the memory from when they were 11, with the kiss, because that was just SO adorable and romantic! :D And now I am definitely, undoubtably positive that he likes her but is kind of in denial about it. :)

And I like that they'd been kind-of friends for nearly their whole lives, and that they live next door to each too, because that kind of adds a whole other dimension to their relationship. :)

I think the saying "Opposites attract" applies to them very well. :P

I thought it was horribly sad that Lilly died. :( She did die, right? Either way, it's very sad, because she was so cute and adorable.

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I liked that Desmond asked for Megan's number, because that was really unexpected! I still think he likes Michelle though, and he might've been trying to see if she'd be jealous?

I also like the way Michelle just calls Megan and goes "Code red! Code red!", 'cause it implies that they've made up specific codes just for situations like those, which is kinda cool and kinda funny. :)

I liked the dream, it was quite weird and creepy. :/

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I like the way Michelle is so obviously falling for Desmond, but is kind of in denial about it, because I like seeing inner self-conflict. :P

I also like the way Desmond asked her to tutor him in math, because I find that kind of cute. I'm almost positive he likes her, now! xP

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I like the way Michelle has glow-in-the-dark stars on her ceiling, because it sounds really pretty, and I've always wanted glowy stars on my ceiling, but never got around to it. :P

I also like that her mom told her not to pick up any hobos, 'cause that's just so random. Why would she be picking up random hobos? Has it happened before, so her mom thinks she needs to warn her not to do it again? :P

Anyway, I thought the golf balls thing was funny, and I thought they both got out of it really well. :P

I found it slightly weird the way Michelle spoke so formally to the principal though, and I thought it was kinda weird when she said she liked his tie. :P

If it was Desmond who put the golf balls in Michelle's locker, how did her know her combination and everything? Hmm. And by now I'm definitely thinking he *likes* her...

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I like that Desmond apologized for evilly tricking Michelle, because it shows that he actually does seem to have a nice side. :)

I also like that he asked her to go get coffee with him, because it sounded like he was asking her on a date or something. :P

I think he *likes* her, but I'm not entirely sure.

Anyway, I'm officially loving this story so far, and I can't wait to read more! (So I'll go read more, then! :P)

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I like the way Michelle wanted to bleach his shirt, because I know I would've done that. :P I can kinda see why she didn't though, it wouldn't exactly help her get the notebook back.

I like that Desmond gave her an exact amount of time until she'd get the notebook back, because it lowers the confusion, I like exact amounts of time, and now it's not like she'll just have to do what he tells her indefinitely, wondering when it'll stop; now she has a time she can have in mind. :)

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I love the way Michelle couldn't help checking Desmond out as he was taking his shirt off, because obviously she didn't really want to be doing that, so it was just kinda funny.

I also liked the way Michelle apparently had Megan speaking to her in her head, and somehow considered it not too strange, because it kinda shows how good friends they must be, and it also shows that Michelle's a bit weird. :P

I'm not sure if I like the way Desmond changed mood so quickly, going from being grateful, to being kinda mean to Michelle. On one hand, it's a bit random, but on the other hand, it does kinda make sense considering how arrogant he's supposed to be; he wouldn't wanna be seeming too nice or vulnerable.

Anyway, I'm really liking this so far! :)

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This is great, it's really funny so far! :)

I loved Megan's narration, like she was someone off a documentary, because it was really funny. :P

I also like the way Michelle and Desmond tease each other, and seem to have a kind of friendship-hate thing, because I always think it's really cool when people have those types of relationships. :P

I also think it's kinda funny how Michelle is panicking so much over the loss of their Guy-Notebook, though I can kinda see why she is. :P

I like how the story starts in the middle of something happening (or someone speaking in this case) and background information is just given as it goes along.

I also like how quickly something interesting happened, as opposed to if you'd kept the story going for a while and not introduced a plot until much later, 'cause that would've been boring. :)

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Unique idea overall! I like how you addressed the guys as 'subjects'.

'But of course, sand isn't as sweet as sugar.' Cool line!

It's nice how you explained the background behind the relationship of her and Desmond, it was nicely placed as well.

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NO! Very well written- but such a sad ending (

dude! You had me hooked when i read the summary. I cant wait to read this! Ill get to it when i get the time :)

okay seriously, I CAN. NOT. STOP. READING. THIS. STORY!

I literally laughed out loud at the airplane part!