|Reviews for The Mediate|
| Open your eyes Chopstick chapter 1 . 1/26/2011
okay, it's so short, i cant really give a constructive feedback like i usually do. so i'll just tell tell you what i saw and what i liked about it. :)
There should be a comma after "Abbott"
This had a random, internal talking, type of story. Rambles that seem to connect still. I'm not sure if this would work throughout a novel length story yet, but for now, as an intro, it was okay.
It had a lot of a mysterious feel to it. I liked that. Vague, with the "it" and the caps of "glow" "enterance" "light." It really stressed those words.
so good job. :)
Do you think you could R&R my story "Twist of Daisy"? Thanks!