Reviews for What Do You Want
MyHeartsInTheInk chapter 1 . 2/12/2011
Very compelling its chaos help it run smoothly and conveys the message. I enjoyed it thank you for posting. Great job
BlameMyMuses chapter 1 . 2/8/2011
Wow, intense! You start reading and all of a sudden you're reading faster and faster just to get to the end.

I loved the repetition of [What do you want}, it's very effective and the words themselves just gain in intensity each time.

The emotions are strongly felt - like I was breaking down with you.

BlameMyMuses
whisper.me.sweet chapter 1 . 2/7/2011
wow. this was really good.. i found myself scrolling down the page faster and faster as it got more and more intense.
cab fed hig chapter 1 . 1/27/2011
scary, worth reading
Thoth Tarot chapter 1 . 1/27/2011
i like the flow and pacing which seemed to get faster and more urgent as the poem went on, ending in 3x what do you want. i like how is like someone having a panic attack, unable to breath and finally blacking out. good poem.
D.J Wu chapter 1 . 1/26/2011
Sweet! More awesome poetry! Keep it up!