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Old xRayneWolfx account chapter 1 . 2/13/2011
Very nice one-shot, full of action and gripping as ever. :) ~Kairee-Anne, roadhouse
NVR chapter 1 . 2/12/2011
Wow! This is an awesome short story. I feel like I've read a long story, because you've included everything that a longer chapter would have. Even though it's shorter, there still is a lot of great describing words, fantastic sentence structures and a well-written, well-planned and plotted story even with about 1,600 words. Great work!

Maybe you had a certain word limit, but if you wanted to make the story longer, maybe you could give a little background information why these 2 people are doing this, who do they work for, why are they trying to rescue children, that sort of thing, unless you want the reader to not know this things and keep it all a mystery, but thats up to you!

I love this story even though it is short. It has everything!

NVR (Repayed)

P.S: I saw this story only had 1 review, so I decided to review it! :)
Narq chapter 1 . 2/2/2011
Hm. A lot of action, certainly.

I like how I'm thrown straight into a war, and somewhat understand what's going on.

The way you noted the ethnicity and the accents was interesting, too.