very good. don

I enjoy your story, i'm pretty sure i reviewed you before-didn't feel offended that I can't remember i have short term memory loss. But i just wanted to say, its good and never force yourself to give anything less then your best-trust me. I just am curious at where this is going, from what you said the writer's block is truly understandable. This idea could go into so many directions. Sojust think of what they're pasts are like, how that affected them, who those men from Shea's past have to do with who is now, why Shea has to kill Amaya, who sent him, why did he except, how are they going to become friends, blah, blah, blah. You know the usual questions that you probably have an answer to or don't that are very annoying. But you know-they might give you some ideas. Anyways, just wanted you to know you're doing a great job and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

I'm really enjoying your story a lot, i'm one of those romaticoholics that just loves when you show both points of views. I think this is a great story and i see you haven't updated for a while, so I'm going to beg once and then I'll go. Please update as soon as possible. i'm excited to see what happens next.

regarding the use of the word "bad" could you mean "bag" or something else?

Interesting story but I am not usually drawn to fantasy stories.

Somehow my review was lost. Starting over:

The character development is good. Including the ages is good although identifying the ages and relationships is usually made part of the story. The use of "and" does not seem to be overdone. Thanks for sharing don

I'm new to Fiction Press (though I've been on for a while now), and this was the first story I pressed. It instantly caught my attention, and I can't wait for the next update :) Great writing so far, I like your style, and I'm glad that you haven't revealed all of the secrets yet :) It adds a little mystery to the story ;)

aw this chapter was so short! I'm looking forward to the next one. I want to know what happens to Amaya and the assassin :)