Reviews for It Hurts
Unknown Sorrow chapter 1 . 6/21/2011
The repetition is a good thing. For some reason, it seems a bit choppy to me though. Also, with short lines like this, I recommend keeping an eye out for the amount of syllables in the lines. It can throw off the rhythm of the poem. Ex: The last line of the first stanza "It hurts just to be me" would flow better if you written it "It hurts to be me" instead.

Keep writing!

Sorrow
yvonnecullen chapter 1 . 3/29/2011
Aw, that was sad! And it was about you! That makes it worse! unfortunately I'm the type of person who would most probably go up and slap those bullies, and get suspended in the process. Your poems are so sad! Keep writing them!
Lyn Harkeran chapter 1 . 2/10/2011
I love the simplicity of this poem. You feel the sorrow of this child, and you pity him or her. You wish you could help them, and stop the bullies who are making their life a living hell.

This is a beautiful piece my friend. Please continue to write poems. For I see a real talent in you. :)