Reviews for Us Against The World |
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![]() ![]() Please update soon! Please, Please PLEASE! I am absolutely IN LOVE with this story! |
![]() ![]() Plz update soon plzzzzz ;-; |
![]() ![]() I love this story! No like I LOVE this story! I really cannot wait to see what will next between Cy and Eva! Please update soon! |
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![]() ![]() ![]() [Swallowing her current mouthful, it looked rather forced, she gave me a bemused look.] Either dashes around "it looked rather forced" or change it to "which looked rather forced." [It that really it] Is. [ just after informing me that was wanted to be a physiologist] "that she wanted" ? ["You really don't understand how much to mean to me] you mean to me. [ I could you shouting] could hear you - Hah, I knew I loved Saffy. She's that kind of person that I'd hate in real life, but she's such a fascinating character. Even though Eva hasn't really admitted anything to her, you know Saffy's going to support her. In fact, I wonder if Saffy's going to push her even farther than she would go on her own. That should get interesting soon. I like that you had Miss Denby being suspicious of Cyrus because their actions with each other in school have been bordering on unrealistic. I have a little trouble believing that he would have gone into that office with her when he's holding so much guilt, but I guess it can be chalked up to a fault in his character that he really did want to talk to her that badly. ["But not a proper one. Believe me, that stupid little thing in France should never come close to constituting a real kiss.] Ahaha. I love this so much. With him being so resolute on the matter, it is good to see his feelings for her showing through, especially in such a trademark immature Cyrus kind of way. |
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![]() ![]() I'm too lazy to log in... Awww :3 I liked this chapter. It was good. I'm really loving Saffy. :D Uh, I guess this is where I would put some terrific critisism, but...yeah, I don't really have any XD |
![]() ![]() ![]() It was a good chapter! :) But i wish you would do updates more often. |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Jesus. Mary. And Joseph. Even God himself. After starting to read this about 2 hours ago, I could not tear my eyes away from the computer screen. As a result I currently have square eyes and an imprinted burn mark on my legs from where the laptop has been rested on me for so long. I've been told in the past that I'm a fairly good writer, but reading this makes me unhappy, and a little jealous - what I'm trying to say is, it's very, very good. Your writing style is incredibly sosphisticated, but from your note at the end of this chapter my spider-senses lead me to believe that you can't be any older than I am, which just impresses me that little bit more. My only critique is to watch for any minor mistakes when you're typing - however I understand what it is like trying to type as fast as you think *the woes of stubby fingers* Keep it up! Peace out - Ginger Fingers |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like this chapter! :) Mr. Eccells reminds me of Shikamaru Nara, a character from a manga, "Naruto". With his view on women, and the way he seems to be a bit lazy at times. :D And I love Saffy already! Ugh, exams...This was the last year before I had to take them. Good-bye easy school days! XD I hope you do well on your exams! Sina |
![]() ![]() Hurrah I got a mention. Also why... Anyway I like Saffy. It seems a legit new charecter whom Eva can relate to while retaining an air of freshness with personality. Also shouldent you be revsing Good and Evil? Also would it not be Dolres *was* supposed to do given that she was quite obviusly torn apart by a horde of angry potter fans at the conclusion of the seventh book? Or died of old age. Who knows. Back on topic decent writing throughout the chapter again. Your getting my reviews damnit. |
![]() ![]() I can once again say "wow," you can definitely write. I applaud you on that. Your characters are deep and the plot is great and not cliched. Get through your exams, good luck. Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I began reading this and I was immediately sucked in. However when I finally realized this is not MxM (I'm ridiculous, I know lol)I got discouraged to read on, BUT you're skills in writing and just everything is great so far (: great job 3 |
![]() ![]() poor eva! :[ she has no one in her corner. At least before she had cyrus now hes being an ass. Pleaseeeeee update soon! |