|Reviews for b is for blank expression|
| electrical moon chapter 1 . 9/20/2011
Wow, this is beautiful. Your style is very unique and powerful. I love the message of this poem (or at least, the one I interpreted from it).
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 3/19/2011
"the expose/of second hand/lingerie were/optical"... the phrasing here confused me. Did you mean exposure? Or exposé? 'Cause expose didn't seem to fit. Also what was the were referring back to? 'Cause I would think it would be lingerie was. And if you meant exposé and that's what it was referring to then that would be was also.
"chemical oxymoron's"... I'm not getting the 's is it supposed to be possessive because I can't figure out what it would be possessing? And I don't get how it would work as oxymoron is either. I'm thinking maybe you just meant oxymorons?
I really liked the second stanza. The image of the bug was a really great simile. The part about the harmonies of birds and traffic was also a really great description.
Beautiful piece as always...
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| recycle rhymes chapter 1 . 2/26/2011
i like the diction of this. and the flow is perfect. your imagery is breath-taking.
| limpwrist chapter 1 . 2/14/2011
Now this is beautiful, powerful.
The second stanza left me speechless