|Reviews for Wand (ワンド)|
| TheDeadEdge chapter 5 . 7/4/2012
Heheheh... On top of loads of characters, I have to remember these affinity thingies as well? God save me if you decided to make us remember their affinities...
Oh well, I can grasp some concepts at least. So I guess Sora and Hikaru are going to be like a battle couple except Sora sits idly by or something?
| TheDeadEdge chapter 4 . 7/4/2012
Ok, the student council are a secret magical organization, the mysterious young man will inevitably be important to the plot as well as the kids he was looking for and those two are villains. The Catalyst was stored in Sora when she met that guy.
| DevilPogoStick chapter 1 . 7/3/2012
Hey, I like what I'm reading so far! :)
You gave very great descriptions that brought the scenes to light up and made it very enjoyable to read. I can't wait to read what else you got in store for the story itself!
Keep up the great work!
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/3/2012
Okay, I've finished the prologue!
This is a pretty interesting start. I like the description throughout this chapter it gave me a good picture of the scene and what's going on. Very good.
The flashback was very good as well. This is an interesting start and I can't wait to read more.
| Guest chapter 15 . 7/2/2012
Hmm, very informative. So Sora and Hikaru are a forced contract then?
| Guest chapter 14 . 7/2/2012
No theme to the bad guys names at all. Nope, not at all. lol
Heh, still a little lost since I need to reread, but still pretty good. Your wording needs work in some places, though a lot of that can be fixed with more careful proof reading. You also need to watch out for repetitives, like here: "Either the hibernation of the mind will affect the nervous system or they starve to death for not getting any sustenance"
- Everyone should know what causes starvation, so you don't need "for not getting any sustenance." If your reader doesn't know what causes starvation, well, that's their problem. :p lol
| TheDeadEdge chapter 3 . 7/2/2012
Housekeeping Club? I think you mean Home Economics Club.
Oh God. The amount of characters in this story is TOO DAMN HIGH! And it's only the 3rd chapter. Okay, I'll quickly list the current ones so far for my sake.
Sora, Toru, Sakura, Rina, Takato, Kasumi, Hanako, Hikaru, Sayuri, Shou, Tsubasa, Shiori, Ami. And that one guy from the prologue who could or could not be Hikaru. Crap, I'm having trouble keeping up! And I have that bad BAD feeling these are just the appetizers...
Though it seems as if the shojo tones are disappearing and the magical voodoo stuff are starting to kick in. Sayuri, Shou and Hikaru are wizards or something, right? And there's something about Shiori that bugs me. The smart students are always important to the plot! ALWAYS!
| TheDeadEdge chapter 2 . 7/2/2012
I don't get it. Toru seems like a total bro. Why would Sakura divorce him? Though I doubt my question will get an answer seeing as they're not main characters.
Sora has yet to captivate me. Though I do like Kasumi and her genre saviness. Hanako's... Y'know, typical anime genki girl. Not that that's bad.
Overall, still keeping me guessing. And still waiting on magic voodoo stuff.
| TheDeadEdge chapter 1 . 7/2/2012
Well, that was an interesting start. Of course, I'd probably think it's another shojo reading this prologue, but if that note at the end is anything to believe... Ah well, to the next chapter!
| Guest chapter 13 . 6/29/2012
| Lord Slayer chapter 13 . 6/29/2012
This had a really nice fight scene. Now I just need to remember who everyone is, it's so long since I've read this, hehe. ;
There were several points, especially towards the end, where you were in present instead of past tense. Be more careful when you proofread.
| Kisho chapter 12 . 6/27/2012
Omigoooosh, you're back, I totally totally totally did not expect this chapter to show up in my inbox, nya o3o
Welcome baaaack, it's great to see you updating again, nya ;w;
Eheh, I had to go back and read a few old chapters to remember what was going on, nya, but... still, this was awesome, nya, I love all your characters! So dramatic, with the Kasumi and Hanako thing, too, nya, it reads just like a manga cx
Katashi seems like a really cool character, too, though, nya, and I can't wait to see what happens with him next chapter, nya. Good luck with keeping this updated, nya, I'll really be looking forward to more, so do your best! x3
| indescribable music chapter 11 . 11/12/2011
great story! i love your characters! keep on updating...
| Koki Enwai chapter 1 . 6/17/2011
You're off to a great start. This has potential for all sorts of interesting things to happen. Keep up the good work.
| Kisho chapter 11 . 6/11/2011
Hehe, sorry I couldn't review earlier, some stuff came up and it kinda got in the way of reading _'
Not a bad chapter, but definitely not your best, if I may be forward here. _' The chapter feels, I don't know, forced, almost, like you're demanding the story move, rather than just following it as it moves by itself! ... and that's my strange analogy for today. o/
Put more simply, I like the development but the execution here is lacking. Most notably, you have that same lack of impact that you had after your hiatus, and the dialogue feels almost fake... especially in that last scene with Hikaru and Sora. o3o
The scene with Ryuu, Hikaru, and Sora kinda bugged me, too... Ryuu, for the most part, seems really simple, sort of a cookie-cutter character, if you will, with his charming mannerisms and homogeneous crowd of fangirls... even if you're planning on giving him unexpected depth later, an introduction like that is kinda off-putting. _'
... *re-reads review* Woow, I'm being harsh today o.o' I've been criticizing myself so brutally lately I guess it's carrying over into my criticisms of over peoples' writings _''
But like I said it wasn't bad, just not up to the level of your other chapters, I like where you're taking it and stuff... if this were a manga, it'd be like a really cool chapter with messy drawings, if you will o/
Anyway, sorry if I was harsh, I'm waiting for the next chapter~! x3