|Reviews for Wand (ワンド)|
| cud-b-better chapter 4 . 11/24/2013
Brilliant scene at the closing of the chapter! Cliffhangers are always good! Gotta give a reason to get the readers to return. I'm guessing Hikaru is going to appear with a last minute rescue like the cool guy he tries to portray himself as. I'm liking the magic as well, i'm hoping for a good explanation as to just how it works in the coming chapters.
Anyway a few minor errors/corrections I THINK I noticed:
A girl on a grubby soccer uniform - 'in' instead of 'on'
... until a young man on his late twenties plunged through - same as above
Sora was still on a somber mood - same as above
And tears began to well up on her eyes - same as above
the cellphone was back on her hands - same as above
I bet you're with those punks on Azimura High, - same as above
but that what she was going to do - stick another 'was' between 'that' and 'what'
What was the school got to do with this? - 'has' instead of 'was'
With a determine face - 'determined'
Am I nitpicking too much here? Anyway good chapter and a brilliant way to spice the story up.
| Iceleaf chapter 28 . 10/23/2013
You are a rather good writer.
You pace the story well and manage to keep it interesting.
I have found that many stories online are rushed. I am glad yours is not.
I am enjoying it.
| Iceleaf chapter 27 . 10/23/2013
I like it even if it is a long ark.
What did Shou mean in the other chapter? That only _ call such power and knowledge?
| Iceleaf chapter 25 . 10/23/2013
Very like a manga though.
| cud-b-better chapter 3 . 10/2/2013
A typical good looking but rude asshole of a guy. Here is hoping someone drops him down a few (read: a lot) notches. I'm starting to wonder what the guy meant when he said they were doing surveillance. Is sora important in some way?
Anyway a few minor corrections (I think)
I had lived here when I was still six years old and it had been good to be back. - I think you should remove the 'had been' and replace with 'is'
Did your family decided to live back here? - change 'decided' to 'decide'
Sora's face flushed bright pink as she realized who her friends were talking to - I think you mean 'talking about' rather than 'to'
Hikaru was not the boy he was looking for. - replace 'he' with 'she'
I truly am nitpicking at nothing am I. It's actually well written so far. I'll read some more asap.
| cud-b-better chapter 2 . 10/2/2013
Sora's new life seems it could be interesting. Her brother doesn't appear to be too happy with her appearance, I'm not liking her mother too much either (her biological one). I can take a guess what happened between the two though. And a nice little cliffhanger to end the chapter.
Okay time for some minor error corrections I noticed. One issue I think I noticed you seem to like using the word 'on' when I think it should be 'in' instead, I'll list all the instances I found:
1) I read it once on a romance novel,
2) The man then stopped on his tracks and stared at her in awe.
3) Rina spoke on a mild and sweet voice
4) You should join the girls' soccer team on Azimura High School,
5) She's on the same school, too
6) as she put her soccer shoes on her locker
(Just replace the 'on's with 'in's in those six sentences)
She told herself to act normal as possible - stick another 'as' in between 'act' and 'normal'
Apologies if I'm nitpicking too much.
*Escapes to the next chapter*
| cud-b-better chapter 1 . 10/2/2013
So a setting of returning to a place you lived a decade ago, i've seen this done a fair few times but it still never felt old to me. Magic being in the story is already a big 'cud interest point' increase. Unfortunately I can't tell much with just the prologue so time to move on.
*Goes to chapter 1 with smile on face*
| MissKluck chapter 28 . 9/29/2013
Oh my gosh... Oh My Gosh! OH MY GOSH! They finally kissed! Warning: Fangirl scream ahead; KYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH ! They finally did it! And it was also her first kiss! :O Oh, the feels! I wonder if it was his first kiss as well? And they, or at least Sora, finally kicked Bacchus butt (hopefully) and ruined his plans! In your face old man! Who was maybe young after all? I have no idea about him, but in his face anyway! Oh, I'm really in shipping modus right now! It was totally worth having to wait two weeks for this! :D
Okay, I think I've calmed a little down... O:) Yeey, new Arc ahead! I'm really excited to get to know about both Hikaru and Shou and Tsubasa's past! I really wonder what's going on and what has been going on for the two brothers to react in the way they did. I bet Hikaru would have been just as furious, at least it seemed like he would. Also, the bond magic between Hikaru and Sora, it has to do with the Sakura three, hasn't it?! I know it!
Please update soon 'cause I really need to know what happens next! :) Yeah, you seem to be really good to ask questions for us in your A/N's, but I don't mind that much though :) Even though you 'use up' all the good questions :P JK. But anyway, I really like the way you sometimes describe things, ex: Sora blushed like a freshly picked tomato. I laughed so hard at that! :P I needed some more SoraxHikaru fluff now so yeah :P I bet Hikaru will be teased by Minato in one way or another now for this, after all he both heard and most likely saw everything that just happened in the car and outside her house. Okay, this got way longer than I intended, but I guess you won't mind.. Too much at least.. O:) You're still doing a great job with this and just continue to take your time and make good chapters, even though we some times have to wait longer for them, they are worth it when you publish them because you've taken enough time to make them :) I bet there's some grammar mistakes here, but I have a cold so just overlook them, okay? :P See you next time :)
| RTK chapter 5 . 9/16/2013
Fun chapter, nice fight scenes:P
So are wands actually people that accompany the wizard?
And I wonder what the relationship between wizard and warlock is..
What happened to Sora's shield? D:
| RTK chapter 4 . 9/12/2013
Your author's note is right, tons of cliffhangers!
Still standing by what I said in that's a pretty crappt first day. Lol
Sora actually injures herself and Hikaru is acting all mad after being hit on accident by a simple soccerball.. Ugh poor Sora.
The catalyst! Good chapter. Lol
| RTK chapter 3 . 9/11/2013
Hikaru's a jerk. Lol
But I'm guessing he's going to end up being the guy.. Enemies do make the best couples lol
Poor Sora, sounds like a pretty lousy first day of school. Already getting into all those shenanigans.
Lots of characters.. Will take some time to get used to ;P
| MissKluck chapter 27 . 9/10/2013
Well, that was one good fight! Finally Shiori and Sayuri is back together and fighting side by side! Yeey! They kicked Aquarius ass, well mostly, and he won't be back, I just wonder who he is. Also, I don't mind as there is no yuri, 'cause if it was yuri, I probably would have just scrolled past it. Sorry, but even if the story is as good as yours, I still don't like neither yuri nor yaoi so please, none of them? I just want the typical girlxboy, and then I had a really bad experience with an anime that I thought was boyxgirl, but turned out to be boyxboy. It was terrifying O.o Anyway I really hope they can get help to Hikaru soon, I really don't want him to die! And also it was very cute, though maybe a little cliche perhaps, that Sora wanted to save Hikaru even if she had to burst into the ballroom and fight Bacchus, or whatever his name was, alone. :) I really want them to get together, and since their the canon pair, you won't kill them, right? :O On another note, yeah, your spontaneity is really amazing, like really, weren't this Arc supposed to be finished like two or three chapters ago? I just want to know what happens next so please, update soon? :)
| Orange Liger chapter 5 . 9/10/2013
Not bad pretty impressive
| RTK chapter 2 . 9/7/2013
Ehh sounds like Sora's parents got divorced because her mom was a stuck up model that wanted a model husband. Just my speculation. X)
So the girl played soccer and football? I'm confused becausesoccer outside of the US is football and football when used with soccer inplies American football.. I'm confused. D:
Good chapter, lots of characters. Let's see if the blonde guy really is her childhood hero.
| RTK chapter 1 . 9/7/2013
I wonder why Sora is coming back to her old home..
Let's see if she gets to meet her old friend again (I bet she does X))