|Reviews for Wand (ワンド)|
| DevilPogoStick chapter 6 . 1/6/2013
Alright back to Wand.
The attack is pretty awesome, loved the reveal of things, and I'm kind of looking forward to the explanation of magic, as it appears to have many kinds. :)
Keep up the great work!
| Yamakura Saku chapter 1 . 1/5/2013
Wow! This was really an awesome Prologue! Totally going to read the next chapters now XD
I think i just found something awesome to read! Yays! Hehe:P
(I have been looking for something to read on here, and now I got it!:D)
| TheFreeEdge chapter 20 . 1/5/2013
Same old, same old party. We need a brawl! It ain't a party without a brawl!
Keisuke has the brovibes. Then again, I just say every nice guy has brovibes. I like nice guys. And especially nice girls.
I want to say that Po caused Hikaru's mom's coma or something. I don't know. I think it makes sense.
"People flocked over the two wet girls, asking them if they were okay. The girls moaned while some of the less caring and not-so-concerned party goers laughed at them."
Heheh, this could so be taken in a completely different way...
Mask man? Every story needs a Char!
| TheFreeEdge chapter 19 . 1/5/2013
Y'know, I wouldn't mind just reading Minato and Sora's convo. I mean, I'm an advocate of 'show, don't tell' so something like a conversation is something I'd rather be reading through dialogues.
Brodad's being less of a bro to his daughter! Who care?! Brodad is still Brodad no matter what! Sheesh, just solidifying my liking of his character aren't you? Sakura... Well... I didn't expect THAT out of her. *shrug* Rina... Damn. If it involves their daughter on a date, Brodad and Rina sure change a lot in personality, not that I mind. It's all played for laughs.
So, let the party begin!
| xXxd chapter 2 . 1/5/2013
Wow! I really loved your writing! The dialogues flow very well and the plot is great for a first chapter!
The cast were interesting too, and I can relate Kasumi to one of the members in the disciplinary committee of my school. (I always get yelled at for untidy attire and not wearing my tie -.-)
Takato seemed somewhat unfriendly towards Sora. Is it because of the circumstances they are in or because of some reasons? But Sora's character is definitely interesting. She remained positive even though Takato seemed uninterested in her.
Aw, the cliffhanger at the end. That boy definitely has to be the one Sora's looking for! I just know it XD
| kingofe3 chapter 18 . 1/5/2013
A very informative chapter and that was a pretty good fight scene.
| kingofe3 chapter 17 . 1/5/2013
It was kinda funny. I enjoy conversations between characters.
| Lord Slayer chapter 23 . 1/4/2013
Another good battle scene.
You need to work on redundancies. I notice that a lot of things get mentioned over-and-over after you've already mentioned them once, like Hikaru's golden light rapier, or the three flaming arrows, or Sora's raven hair. Once you've mentioned what something looks like it's only on rare occasions that you need to mention that description again, less you run the risk of seeming condescending towards your readers. It also tends to slow down battle scenes, which benefit from shorter sentences. Just say "Hikaru's rapier," or arrows.
| Lord Slayer chapter 22 . 1/4/2013
If I could offer a suggestion: Steel seems too specific for an elemental power. There are many different kinds of metal in the world with a ton of properties that you could make use of. (not to mention steel doesn't occur naturally). Why not give yourself more options and make it the element of Metal instead?
| Lord Slayer chapter 21 . 1/4/2013
Noo! Not mind control on Sayuriiiii!
| William Kayspear chapter 23 . 1/4/2013
That! Was! Amazing! The battles are epic and so are you're characters update soon!
| Lord Slayer chapter 20 . 1/4/2013
Gaah! Stop acting like you're going to give vital information and then interrupt! You're driving me crazy with the suspense! Kidding. ;)
"Hey there, old man! Didn't know you're coming!"
- You're is a compound for "you are." It should be "you were."
| Lord Slayer chapter 15 . 1/4/2013
Going back over this part with the way Wands and Wizards work makes me wonder if you've read Negima! before.
| Lord Slayer chapter 14 . 1/4/2013
Hmm. Ze plot thickens. And why am I now French?
Something I've been wondering: Can an infinite caster actually use an unlimited amount of magic, or is there some limit to what they can do?
| Lord Slayer chapter 12 . 1/4/2013
Seems weird that Katashi would look down on both the unempowered and Wands. Especially if he's going through all the trouble to collect a Sacred Wand like Sora.
One thing that kind of bothered me structurally was this: "We advise you not to bring any of your friends from Azimura High. If you do so and we will ALWAYS know if you do so, we cannot assure their safety."
- The part "and we will always know," isn't needed, because of course they'll know if she shows up with friends.
Good job all the samel, though.