I find the chase here to be too easy... And it's like she gave up everything to him just like that. From friends to husband and wife. Seems unrealistic. And in th beginning it seemed like she barely entertained that idea so her agreeing to it just because of mind blowing sex just appears off.

I love that ending. I actually think that I would very much approve of a weekend like that ending with a chapel lol. Great story. Loved it.

Of all your stories, this one is my least favorite. I don't like the inconsistencies of Charlie's attitude. I see this character as someone bossy yet intelligent. The kind of woman most guys would love to bed but afraid too knowing she can be a bitch. But all throughout the 'love scenes', everything crashed.

And maybe because I'm not the kind of person who wants to be submissive that I'm not liking the sexual scenes of this story.

This is my opinion so don't think most readers would agree with me.

Keep writing.

what a fantastic story had me thinking all the way through absolutely loved it.

that was great! not what i was expecting but i enjoyed this story from beginning to end

Congrats on finishing it was a great story! I think this one was my favorite. Haha looking forward to reading your other stories and seeing where you take them :).

is she going to tell him?

...I dont know if this chapter was an accident? but it does not belong in this story...

Wow.. you posted in the wrong place... This chapter is from The Bargain, right? hahaha

I was confused in the begining

Hey Marzydotes I love your updates. Thanks for updating all your stories your awesome. I just wanted to let you know I think this chapter is for the Bargain? I'm pretty sure because the names are not the same. Hope I helped and I can't wait for your next updates. :)

Just a quick note - your stories are great and hot! Even your little 1 chapter stories are good - very talented.

Very touching

O sounds like this party might be any orgy. P Loving this story of course and yay it has a bunch of chapters. Then you just keeping making more stories too i love it! I can't catch up but I love it all P

Great story so far! So hot and steamy- I like the volley of power between the two. I'm intrigued to know what games are in store...

lol