Reviews for Melody |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Everything in this fic sounds perfecttt:) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw i want him to date the cop:3 |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love it :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just saying, I play saxophone and I don't really like your description of how he played. First off, you didn't mention how he put the pieces together & wet his reed. You can't exactly play a saxophone softly, you can play softly in comparison to the usual volume, but it would still definitely garner attention. You also used the word keys, but they are more like buttons. You should also mention something about his breathing. Because it's such a large instrument, playing can often get you out of breath and cause numbness in your lips (depending on what you're playing, but because he's playing a quick tune, both would apply). You also had him end quickly, and had the last note 'ring in the air' when it usually is an abrupt loss of sound, because you are no longer supplying the instrument with its fuel, air. Sorry if I was being a bit harsh, but I'm going through withdrawal from not having my sax over the summer. :'( |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ah, yaoi... I haven't read yaoi this good since, well, forever. Thanks for the great read! |
![]() ![]() ![]() ... Will come back to read the rest when my family isn't trying to peak over my shoulder... This is addictive, and very good at making me blush. Keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Noooooooo... this can't be happening... It's not the end, right? Truthfully, I just read this story in one sitting, and I have not been reading it as it's been written. I spotted a few errors, just letting you know. I have the sentence and stuff written, if you ever feel like fixing it. Other than that, I really enjoyed reading Add's and Milo's story. It's really cute :3 Tehee I get wayyyy to involved in books. I end up crying if someone dies at the end. Anywho, here are the errors I spotted- Chapter 3- Secrest I think this should have been secrets. Chapter 7- When Add says- I don't need to dog classes. I think this should be "I don't need to go to, or I don't need dog classes." Chapter 13- "Your mom sure it ...something." Is, not it, right? Chapter 14- "Jensen know about us." *Knows* Anywho, that's all I spotted while reading. Also, how old is Milo? I know he should be 21 or older, because he drank beer, but how old is he exactly? Awesome writing! :) -Bluesparks |
![]() ![]() ![]() I truly enjoyed this story and definitely it's going to my favs, but I got to say that you never really described how most of your characters looked. Anyway thanks for being such an awesome writer and sharing this fic. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it! Loved it! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just love their relationship. Must say again... really great story ;p |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ch. 5... Totally good & fun story. Love Addison's character & Milo's ;p |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved this story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i loved this from start to finish xD i was so scared it would end in a tragic way, it wasn't until the last three chapters or so i relaxed. i was afraid addison's old life would catch up with them or something. maybe tucker wasn't THAT bad, at least he let addison go. the one thing that bothered me was that adi didn't start studying or got a job, i feel that he's way to dependent on milo. i love how the story changed, from all that violence and just that life, to to the domestic bliss xD i've never read a story about that kind of "normal life", usually when they start off like yours, they either end in quite the same way, or they end with them getting together, not continuing the story after that. i loved it! it just made the story so much sweeter, and showed how milo and adi worked together. hmm, i don't really like that he forgave his mom, not with her not being COMPLETELY accepting. i don't like homophobes and i'm not a forgiving person. that new neighbour made me really curious, i thought something would happen between him and adi, don't know what, just something p anyways, thank you for an AMAZING story, made me laugh, almost cry and really angry, i love when a story makes you FEEL ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh god! that was so awful, it had me struggling not to cry! i just don't understand homophobes! i'm so glad milo was there. |
![]() ![]() So...I just read that whole thing in one sitting, and I have work in about an hour. Yup. I'm doomed. The story was amazing. So addictive. |