Reviews for Infestation
underground-writing chapter 2 . 2/24/2011
Pretty good story so far. I especially like how you explained hyper sleep and its side-effects. I also like Alpha. His banter with TJ in the beginning was amusing. There are a few things you should consider working on. For one, there is very little description. Without it your story feels more like a script than anything else. Just toss in a few paragraphs of description and you'll be good to go. Also, you might want to consider rereading your story. I found several run-on sentences, but it didn't really take away from the quality of the story. Lastly, you repeat yourself quite a bit. Try varying your sentence structure and using more synonyms. Other than that your story has certainly captured my interest. I'm looking forward to learning what happened to the Orion.