|Reviews for Rearden: Meeting the Morgans: October 2008|
| Dreamers-Requiem chapter 1 . 1/7/2014
You could build on this quite a lot. (I know it’s an old one, but still.) You move quite fast through the events of the story, and don’t really give us a lot of time to get to know any of the characters. If you slow down the pace a little, especially near the beginning, you could spend some time expanding on his emotions, hint a bit more towards the fact that he’s running away. Is he scared? Does he think his family will come after him? Like I said, there’s a lot you could build on. It’s quite dialogue heavy, so maybe adding in some emotions and character description between dialogue would really help open it up more. Good luck, as always.