this is hot, thanks!

please continue - write about the next 30 days? This is so hot!

You need to continue this... pLease? Pretty please? I want to know who the guy really is! You can't just gave us pleasure like this and then just leave..

This is awesome please continuee! I wanna know who he really is!

I loved it. The way you set the story up clear through to almost the very end captivated me. I couldn't look away from the computer. The only thing I didn't like was it seemed to come to such an abrupt halt. I guess i just wanted a little more detail there at the end. But other than that...Epic!

I must say, this isnt the kind of thing I usually read, but I'm glad I did. It was well written, with strong characters and a nice hint of mystery to add a deeper level to it. That I really liked.

I'm sure you know it was pretty damn creepy, but i'm going to tell you that any way :)

Really good writing, and it definitely has the potential to be extended to novel length.

Mohahahahahahaha loved it, although i thought he was like the devil or somethiing with the god comments, but you should keep on writing this, make it longer.

What a random but cool story. I like how your stories are very like I can leave it to your imagination kinda thing. They are very intruging and I would really like it if the stories had more chapters. :)

You should seriously think of making this an actual story! It was really good, and definitely interesting enough to become a full length story. I really wanna know what he is, and how everything turns out!

This was really awesome, not the norm at all. Plz consider making this a story. :D

OMG! please tell me that theres more to this story cause its freaking amazing... im begging you to please having other chapter up soon cause i wanna know whats gonna happen, what is he?

umm... wow... I definitely wanna see where you're going with this. Also, it's nice to see you branching out some and writing a guy who is definitely not the classic cowboy like your other stories (don't get me wrong, i personally would pick the cowboy any day, but this makes for a good read) :)

omg! i really liked it! are you sure this is your first story?

For helpful criticism, i think that instead of just adding a whole bunch of info all at once, like in little paragraphs, you should kind of spread them out. That way, it'll flow more easily. Other than that, i loved the suspense part when shelley walked up the stairs. I was like, shaking to know what would happen, well i kind of knew, but you get what i mean )

i hope you write a whole lot more stories D