|Reviews for Drunk Text|
| Poptart Guava King chapter 12 . 9/29/2011
OH GUNNAR YOU SILLY LOVESICK BASTARD. WOOOOOAH. This probably makes no sense but this chapter was so "GAY" ...yea I make no sense. whatever.
| sardo chapter 12 . 9/29/2011
Damn I like this story it's so funny and entertaining, but really what Gunnar did in this chapter is unbelievable. He finally attained what he wanted after that much difficulty just to mess it up. oh man I'm a bit afraid of Vancelot *sniggers* reaction.
| KalinGee chapter 12 . 9/28/2011
You know what I love about this chapter? It’s the completely smashed Gunnar’s ramble/confession - you make it seem so real! Not to mention the scene before that? So action-packed, bet if Gunnar wasn’t drunk he’d swoon (I would… not that I’d like men fighting over me… nah, I just like Vance too much at this point).
As for the last scene… demmit Gunnar! You should’ve enjoyed the afterglow or something! Not run away! Geez… this kid. Such an adorable in-denial cutie you are.
Will be waiting for the next chapter! Keep being great!
| Messing With Minds chapter 12 . 9/27/2011
Up till now I've really liked this story and the writing. But this chapter really got on my nerves.
First: the incomplete sentences. I understand what you were trying to do with those, and I think they can be useful in moderation, but they were so overused in this chapter that I actually stopped caring what Gunnar wanted to say.
Second: More of a personal pet peeve. I hate it when romance stories get so close to things being good and then its all stripped away over a small problem. Accidentally saying the wrong name, saying "I love you" too early, an ex showing up... To me they're all just easy drama creators that don't require much work. They also completely ruin my mood and make me not want to keep reading. For once I would like to read a romance story where the relationship didn't have to be "perfect" before the two guys tried it out. One where Gunnar became used to saying something like "I love you" while already in a relationship with Vance.
I'm not trying to be too critical though. I've really liked this story. I think you've made some really good characters and I think they're interacting well. These were just my pet peeves this chapter.
| my infectious smile chapter 12 . 9/27/2011
Oh they're so cute...this is an awesome story! I can't wait to see Gunnar obsess about what he almost said. That was such a great chapter. I love that Vance was so angry about Neil and that they came to an agreement about their relationship...so I'm therefore excited to see Vance's reaction to Gunnar's running. All in all, this is really wonderful and I'm looking forward to the next!
| Guest chapter 12 . 9/27/2011
I agree with all the praise here... This chapter was *really* great in so many ways. The last scene was all intense and so good... I am definitely not complaining about the angst at the very end, as I'm not ready to have this story end yet! Thus, I approve of additional plot complications :).
| mechante fille chapter 12 . 9/26/2011
*grins* Oh, boys. They are so silly. But, uh, the drunk was awesome and I'm glad it giggled all those words out. Hm, we'll see what Vance does about being run out on. Or how Gunnar feels about all that in the AM.
| govener fink chapter 12 . 9/26/2011
Usually I just read this and don't comment (A bad habit I know), but as I was reading this my emotions went a little like this and I felt that I had to share:
Aw~, I'm proud of you Gunnar!, Aw~, Haha! oh Gunnar, What! Neil no!, yeah! Kick some ass Vance!, Oh no!, Aw~, They've finally realized there feelings!, Aw~ Sweet love-making, to finally:
"NOOOOOO GUNNAR, YOU TURN AROUND THIS INSTANT! DON'T DO THAT! TURN AROUND AND LOVE YOUR MAN! YOU FINALLY HAVE HIM! NOOOO!" D:
Not the most dignified reaction but, that's me for ya. This is SO well written, I love it. I can't wait to see what happens!
Probably perversely, my favorite part is this: "...And soon enough, he's three-fingers deep in Vance, whose moaning and shuddering and begging Gunnar to just "Do it already."
Keep it up! This is BEYOND excellent!
| mechante fille chapter 11 . 9/26/2011
And I'm already behind! Well, more for me to look forward to reading.
Love that Gunnar is 'getting there' in the relationship with Vance. It is interesting to watch Vance without knowing his pov. He's still so free with words but not with anything that smacks of commitment. Interesting man.
Excellent narrative and dialog once again.
| cisumodnaraehi chapter 12 . 9/26/2011
Wow, that was just. Depressing. Beautifully written, but whiplash was right. And here I thought that it had finally come to an end!
| Yellow Cotton Hat chapter 12 . 9/26/2011
NO YOU BLOODY BASTARD! GET BACK THERE! REMAIN WITH YOUR LOVED ONE!
STAY WITH HIM, GUNNAR! WHAT THE FUCK DO YOU THINK YOU'RE DOING! YOU MADE SUCH PROGRESS, GO BAAACK! GOO BAAAAAACK!
*I freaking favourite this story every time, as if it does anything.. IT'S JUST TOO GOOOD!
| Initially loaded chapter 12 . 9/26/2011
NNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOO. love the way this develops.
| MyLifeSoundtrack chapter 12 . 9/26/2011
I don't even know where to start. Like, I seriously don't because there were a million little amazing points to this chapter and you update so fucking fast now... incredible! I just woke up and since I'm a glutton for checking all of my internet social outlets, when I saw the update I went there ASAP! And I read it and, you know what. I'm PMS-ing so I cried all emotionally at the end of this chapter and I was like "SERIOUSLY!"
Yep, I was yelling at the screen and my brothers (because we're having a gay sleepover) asked what was wrong and I told them and they just shook their heads and went back to playing the videogame or watching gay porn, whichever. But yea. Onto my review and enough spiel about my daily life/PMS-ing.
First, I totally loved Gunnar's interview and Cara's mom. Her mommy is exactly like my mommy so I was in love with that part of the chapter. Seriously, I'm not even joking. But I loved the interview and I loved Gunnar's list soooooooooooooooo much. It was friggin adorable. He's just- I just- GUH! I love him. This review is probably super awkward right now but I can't help it. I'm emoting all over the place! But yea. Gunnar's interview was stellar and I liked the end of it so much.
The party! Neil is a hoe fo sho but I loved his use in making Vance all jealous and relationship-y. I so loved Gunnar's loves confession monologue while he was drunk. Damn that kid has a set of balls on him when he's drunk. His babbling about being teammates and bar mitz fahs (sp?) and just everything was too cute. And good for him, standing his ground on not fucking until they were some kind of committed...
But then he totes fucked it up by running out of the apartment after getting some ass. Love is such a scary thing isn't it? Poor Gunnar. And I think I can guess what happens next... kind of. I have an inkling of a clue. But damn... Vance and his sexy and Gunnar and his sexy and I just love your writing style so friggin much that it's ridic.
I could never write in close third because it would drive me insane. It has. But you do it like a boss and I envy your skill. The sex was hot btw. Really, seriously, deleriously hot. I have a kink for couples who cum together cuz there's just so much intimacy involved in those scenes and you can tell that that's when things have shifted in their relationship... so awesome. Kudos to you hun.
Amazing chapter and I'll be waiting for the next one which I'll assume won't be too far away seeing as you're on a roll.
Steamy canvasy-paint sex! I already has ideas for that too. Vance and Dalton would be in for a treat. And Brendon could totally occupy Gunnar in the meantime so that things are even.
I'm glad you're liking the stuff I sent you. I mean, Arynn's story is so ancient and needs tons of work but I still liked the whimsical idea of the whole thing and it's quick/easy to read and go through. But there are soooooooooooooo many characters (and I could name them all and describe them sadly). But I can wait to hear what you think. I'm just glad you're liking it.
As for RAZOR... I have like 4000 words written but the chapters are usually longer but I think I could wrap it up... should I just post it? It's short but, well... Maybe I will. It's an important one so I guess it'd be find if it's short. Whatever. Maybe by the end of this week it'll be up.
Anyway, lovely chapter, as per usual, and I can't wait until you update.
| Malaia chapter 12 . 9/26/2011
I just want to say, after reading most of this chapter, I feel like this:
~And Gunnar starts feeling like he does after he's spent the whole day at the pool and he can still feel the waves cresting over him when he's out of the water, later, hot and dry under the sun.~
I don't need to say anything else. Do I?
| Raaawr Ima Dinosaur chapter 12 . 9/26/2011
I LOVE a drunk Gunner. He's so funny and so adorable! SQUEE! But woah. Vance gives and and then Gunner leaves? then again, I can kinda understand...ish lol.
Great chapter (with a jealous Vince WOOH!) please update soon! :D