|Reviews for My best friends|
| sharks don't sleep chapter 1 . 2/28/2011
I really enjoyed the sentiment of this poem (I relate very much, actually, and it was refreshing to read something I could completely understand so much of).
However, from a literary standpoint I's like to encourage you to maybe go a little deeper than the surface of this issue in your writing. You don't give very much away (I don't necessarily mean details of the situation, but actually your emotions seem flat in this piece). Mostly this poem is based on "telling" which can sometimes have a great impact, but "showing" is what really draws a reader in and makes a poem stand out. Mixing them up is what makes for a stronger piece overall.