|Reviews for More of the Same|
| YasuRan chapter 1 . 3/1/2011
I thought 'And the bam - eternal rest' is a unique way of phrasing how one works on into the end of their life. The abrupt, almost violent connotations of that line are apparent in this stanza and the next with 'It all gets burnt, pile after pile'. The imagery of the 'A-B-C colouring books' morphing into files is quite appropriate as well.
However, while I enjoyed the probing nature of the rhetorical third stanza, I feel like the last one seems to 'give up' too easily, especially when you've come up with such strong imagery in the previous verses. I would've liked to see more because the theme of the poem did sound interesting.
| ag9577 chapter 1 . 2/28/2011
I like the poetic license a lot! The way you bolded words to get the point across...
You've got a point with this! Lol. Nice work!