Reviews for A Razor As Sharp As My Tongue
Ery chapter 1 . 10/6/2013
::sob::
It's not finished. Probably too long since last update but... If I beg will you continue? :)
Ery chapter 4 . 10/6/2013
Loving it so far!

Quick note: I believe "curve" should be "curb"?

I haven't been able to curve these childish burst of memory driven emotion.
PandaA chapter 10 . 8/30/2013
Please update. I love this story and am curious as to how you will go about continuing this story. Please update. I've re-read this story many times.
JessieGT chapter 10 . 5/4/2013
I really like this story - are you going to complete it?
Guest chapter 2 . 1/7/2013
Enjoyed it
Love U Te chapter 10 . 1/6/2013
Ohhh i just adore this story update soon :D
Love U Te chapter 1 . 12/29/2012
This is so lovingly twisted c: lol i like it
Aynon chapter 10 . 12/22/2012
Hope that Phoenix can "fix" Dalton. I think he's more damaged than he fully realizes (and that Phoenix is faaaar far darker than he realizes) and hopefully Phoenix can use his evil manipulative powers for good, teach Dalton to use his powers for the same, and Dalton can be happy again :)
K.T. Piffle chapter 10 . 10/28/2012
Hey! I just stumbled across your story and read it all the way through in one sitting. It's very very good! I'm loving it! Dalton is a very intriguing character... I can't wait to learn more about the inside of his brain! I would like more about Pheonix though... I mean, how much is he actually taken in by Dalton despite knowing about his "toys" etc? Please update soon! :)
pterodactylion chapter 10 . 8/18/2012
I'm not sure if I should review, because it might hurt your feelings, but I'll be honest, okay? :)

Firstly, this story is very properly written, but it is dull. I think what I dislike most about it is that it's written in first person. Sure, it's interesting to see the world from the perspective of a person who has ASPD, but it does not necessarily make a story good to read (note that I didn't say "good read"). Also, it gets just a little repetitive.

Having a personality as Dalton does makes him all the more an "unreliable narrator", especially since he bases nearly everything on sequences (personally, main characters who think they know everything, all the time, and are portrayed in first person piss me off) and that makes everything he thinks and the views he has biased or skewed in some way.

That said, I don't mind "unreliable narrators" (intentional or not) so long as they are modest, because it at least places a seed of trust in the reader's mind. Right now, all we know is that Dalton likes sex, is extremely manipulative, and very proud - so we don't trust his thoughts / views at all.

If you update, I'll keep reading.

All the best c:
Ghostmoon Dancer chapter 10 . 7/28/2012
I find this story intriguing. Keep up the good work!
Maya LeFay chapter 10 . 7/24/2012
Ermagawd. This is possibly- no wait, certainly the best story I've read on fictionpress for a whole. For realsies. The depth of your characters' emotions and feelings, their reactions and the characterisations are absolutely, positively breath-taking. I feel like I can just crawl inside Dalton's mind and stay there all day, hearing his observations and just viewing the world through his eyes. You've made these wonderfully complex characters that I can relate to on a soul-deep level and it's just so beautiful. Thank you for writing this.
Guest chapter 10 . 7/5/2012
Please. Please upload. This story is amazing. I love it all! Dalton is absolutely great. I like his persona.
I know you haven't updated in a while and I'm hoping you will continue to do so and not abandon this story.
lovesyoumore chapter 10 . 6/22/2012
upload upload UPLOAD!
Bananafishh chapter 9 . 6/16/2012
Grr. I pressed done by accident so imma just continue here.

Now Phoenix. I'm enjoying him getting sucked into Daltons web (indifferent towards Brendan btw, like, he's insignificant) but I want him to turn the tables and ensnare Dalton. I don't even know if it's possible which is why I'm constantly on the lookout for an exploitable weakness of Dalton's, but if it were to happen, that would be beautiful. I mean, Dalton is currently untouchable and I can't possibly imagine him in a demeaning position where's he's been thoroughly played without his knowledge. I actually can't see that happening but it would be awesome :).

Anyhoo, I want you to know that because of your awesome writing skills, in seriously being a psychologist or at least considering studying it. I already analyse people and then piss them off when I'm right, bit to be qualified and do that would be awesome. Seems difficult though...

Btw, rest assured I'm another person who is already a seventhswan fan as I actually got here through her/him.

Sorry for rambling. Please keep writing this. Kudos xxx
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