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| dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 3/18/2011
I love the repitition of this! Even if you weren't repeating words, you had a lot of parallels in word structure, rhythm, ideas, etc. It gave this such a great pulse and a fast, eclectic pace.
First stanza's my favorite. It almost feels like a chant the way you've worded it.
Interesting ending, too. I've never seen literature dissected so literally in poetry. It also wasn't something I was expecting given the rest of the poem, but you transitioned into it well.
[A metaphor is like a simile./Don't fall for it.] Beautiful.
~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
| lymli chapter 1 . 3/8/2011
I think the most of people can forget with no trouble since there's so few things that worth to be remember.