|Reviews for The Long Walk Nowhere, And The Long Walk Home|
| You Don't Understand Me chapter 1 . 9/3/2011
So not lame. And I love Bob Dylan XD
| HiddenFromYou chapter 1 . 3/19/2011
Hey, man, thanks for entering the competition. :)
I do like this story, even if it's a bit jumpy in places. I found that I quite liked both the jumpiness and the repetition of phrases you used though, as I saw them as seeing things from inside the character's head, how he saw everything that was going on around him. If someone was reading this and didn't see things that way though, I can see how the jumpiness and repetition could be annoying.
Even though I liked how "bare" this story was, because it really encapsulates the mind of a teenager trying to find their own way in the world, I would have liked a few more inner thoughts and such, as (especially at the end) you have a very this happened then this happened then this happened feeling.
I love the final line, and I think it ties into the casualness of the lyrics you used, which was good. Overall, I really liked this story. :)