|Reviews for White cheese, red tomato, and some green herbs|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 3/18/2011
"more to do then rest fingers inside"... than
"hid my face in abnormally"... you have sip and order which is present tense, but hid is past tense which confused me.
I liked the repetition in the first stanza with lips and teeth. It worked well to create a flow. The whole piece was well done. Your descriptions and word choices as always were great and I liked the story here too about trying to taste something instead of that person.
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| she smolders chapter 1 . 3/13/2011
The second half of this sounds so familiar to me, like you have taken a slice out of my own life.