Reviews for My World
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 3/20/2011
"Where I could have my happily ever after."... you change tenses here with could. I didn't get that. I think can would fit better.

I liked the idea here. It was really cute and definitely something I think we all do at times. We all want to escape like that.

The actual writing was ok. Some of phrasing like "anything I want" and the word "world" just got a bit repetitive. I also thought maybe some more imagery or metaphors to describe the place as oppossed to what you can DO there.

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Allyson Parker chapter 1 . 3/16/2011
No matter what excuse you use ("I was zoned out so it's not my best") that was really good.