Reviews for Komae Grade School
Baseball Rockz chapter 7 . 4/1/2011
Bodyguard, nice one
Baseball Rockz chapter 6 . 4/1/2011
Yea, nice cliffhanger, -_-!
Baseball Rockz chapter 5 . 4/1/2011
Yea, you should make the next chapters longer
Baseball Rockz chapter 4 . 4/1/2011
Haha! Haru's dead, so his Mother is dead, how sad
Baseball Rockz chapter 3 . 4/1/2011
Is his Mother going to die? Hey, I can be your beta reader
Baseball Rockz chapter 2 . 4/1/2011
What a creepy Father he has
Baseball Rockz chapter 1 . 4/1/2011
Great Story, although you could be more descriptive
Horch chapter 6 . 3/29/2011
Of course it's long enough, Nyka.

And WHY on Earth do first graders know about Arthur MacArthur? That's completely illogical. We were only taught about Arthur MacArthur (Along with Generals Elwell Otis and Wesley Merritt)in fifth grade.

With All Due Respect,

The True Mockingjay (Formerly known as TheGreatUnknown.)
Horch chapter 4 . 3/24/2011
I like how you're always talking about rears.

But I hate how you made Haru's mom die. Why did you have to do that? Haru's mom was the only non-abusive person to Haru, and you had to take her out too? Why didn't you take out Haru's dad?

-EE-
So chapter 3 . 3/24/2011
In this chapter, near the ending, the "breathe" should be "breath". But aside that, great story!
Horch chapter 2 . 3/19/2011
Pebb, the words, the words! I mean, you've certainly improved your spelling since I last read your work, but the idea. It's wrong-how can a seven-year-old know bad words like damn and bastard? That sort of thing just seems wrong. I didn't know words like that when I was seven. -Horch-
TheSyrupNugget chapter 1 . 3/17/2011
Well written, but the speech seems a tad unrealistic coming from a seven year old, particularly one with a strict, abusive father.
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