Reviews for Lidwy |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Update very soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love this story so far :] |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank-you for updating, I still can't wait to read more There are a few typos/ things you may want to improve on if you're interested. You wrote: "I'm sorry dear," the man said, an apologetic smile on his face, I didn't mean to. - I didn't mean to should be in quotation marks ("") and I'm not quite sure what you meant when the head of the stables said "They are worth to be given a change!" - perhaps 'given a change' is not the right turn of phrase. Something like "They deserve a change" or "They deserve someone more interesting in their lives" might fit better? Good luck finding a job and I've voted for your sister's photo :) Please update again soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm really enjoying your story so far and can't wait to read more. I've noticed a few typos you may be interested in fixing to polish your story up a bit more. May I suggest naming the school she's attending - it doesn't matter if it's fictional. By leaving it out it just makes the chapters you've uploaded seem slightly unfinished CHAPTER 2 "Well, they will go after Maurits, because he is the oldest and heir to the thrown and they obviously will chase me because I'm handsome and irresistible…" - I think you meant 'throne' "Still….I will have to rapport you now…this food isn't supposed to be for the servants." - report "Her answer however surprised Arthor. How in heaven's name did she get through? "You mean…you were invited?" he asked in disbelieve." - disbelief |
![]() ![]() ![]() I looks like this is going to be another fantastic story of yours. I can't wait to see more Lidwy is a very fascinating character. I hope wee get to see more of the old servant Lidwy talked to he looked fun. |
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![]() ![]() I love this story so far! It's hilarious, but the siblings kissing is kind of weird...Please update soon! :-) |
![]() ![]() Since you took the time to write this lovely story it seems only fair that I review it :) Naturally, I really enjoy the story thus far. Even though you've only given us a small glimpse of the plot, characters and story as a whole I can't wait to read more. So far its a great story and I like the witty dialogues, those are hard to capture and you've done a brilliant job:) I can't wait to see how the characters develop, I hope you're having fun writing about them. They seem like they can be a handful sometimes lol. Since we've just started the story I can't offer any critique on characters or plot. Keep up the good job :) I look forward to reading the rest of the story |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I need more. I demand it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmm...I wonder what she wants |
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![]() ![]() ![]() it's nice that there are more characters being introduced and Lidwy is making friends, but this chapter was kind of filler-ish but i love this story so far |
![]() ![]() ![]() I didn't mean to say that your story was historically inaccurate. I was just sharing with you on a thought of mine after I read the story where I realised that the story can't possibly fit into the 19th century era. xD I had been reading a bunch of 19th century stories so my mind's still stuck in that period when I read your story. I jump from one story to another without really paying attention to the summary sometimes so stories might blend together after a few hours. In this case, I went from 19th century stories to a fairy tale. It's been a while since I've read a good fairytale story here. Yours is progressing at a good pace & I hope you complete this one. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmm, this must be set in some alternate universe because it does not fit into 19th century England, which I'm familiar with. I like the story thus far. :D Very intriguing characters. Update soon! |