Mission accomplished? Is Julia (if it's still her) finally yours?

The imagery is pretty good, and the mood (I'm thinking sensuous) is crafted pretty effectively. The hot breath running down the neck is a bit of a cliche, but there's no denying that that does happen. The only thing you probably want to watch with that is your pronouns ("you lean hot enough to feel *your* hot breath on my neck"). My inner editor is thrilled with the properly punctuated dialogue. I love the surprisingly sweet ending.

Oh, this was a more kinky love poem. x) I liked it. The emotion seemed real and raw. :)

Keep Writing,

Wrandom