"She pats my hand and smiles

like Candice Swanopoel and

looks at me like Elle Fanning

and then dances like Nina

Revskaya. I cringe."

I don't really like it when you make too much references to characters in the real world. Some people might not know who they are so if you use these people as reference, it's rather confusing to them and it just totally disturbs the flow. But good job anyway, keep it up.