Reviews for I'm Not
punctured.lungs chapter 1 . 3/27/2011
This is really sad. I remember this feeling so well... I'm glad I finally escaped it. Good luck to you. But anyway, about the actualy writing. I like the way this flows. And I love the line "Black and blood."
TripleMelody chapter 1 . 3/27/2011
This is an excellently written poem, and the way you used line breaks was very effective, and made it very easy to read. I also liked the way you broke up the longer parts with a single sentence.

Terrific writing!

~Melody :)
P.A.W.07 chapter 1 . 3/27/2011
Nice. I could feel the sanity of the poem's voice being dragged down with each stanza until I couldn't help but believe the voice was indeed paranoid.

Poor guy/gal, I wouldn't have called back either. XD

Nonetheless, a wonderful dark-tone poem. The punctuation is acceptable since it is a poem and poems are allowed the leeway; what did catch me was a little repetition that wasn't entirely necessary:

"...that I imagined I'd imagined."

Another synonymy might spice up the line instead of two 'imagined's.

Overall, well done.