Reviews for Almost Perfect |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I've sort of moved to Wattpad as well! I'm LaurelTreeBird over there. I can't wait to see the story on Wattpad. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sigh* Everyone moves to wattpad :( haha well i will see if i keep reading since I love watty too! ;) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Trying not to hate you! PLEASE update soon :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm glad you're not quitting on the story, I know how it is to want to redo chapters to make them better. Unfortunately, I do not have the time, lol. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey its cool I'm just happy u wrote an note. Some authors don't write notes telling us why they haven't been updating so its good u have. Can't wait untill the next chapter :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() i found your story and love more please. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Can't wait to read more. ~Natalie |
![]() ![]() ![]() Huh, and here I was thinking Zack liked her, I guessed wrong then. Anyway, thank you for continuing the story :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really do like this chapter, though it seems a little rush what with the four different POVs. I just want to give you one piece of advice about something that's technically not that important and other people are going to be like, "What the hell?" but in talking about time lapses and stuff (I'm referring to the scene where Cole and Abrielle are in the park with his puppy)you don't really want to tell the EXACT time: "Thirty-four minutes later, Cole had to leave, and that meant, sadly, that Pikachu had to go, too." I'm not saying you need to totally like fix it and reupload, god, that would be awful for me to tell you that! But I suggest you say, "Some time later." I was also going to say that you could expand that scene just a bit too. I realize that it's a REALLY good place to have Cole kiss her and I 100% agree, but, it is a little random that he suddenly has his puppy to show her. And he can still have his dog with him but even as he's showing her and she's playing with him, they could be one-on-one talking about... 'us' you know? And umm... Zak's POV in the beginning seemed kind of pointless to me... that sounds rude, but it just sounds like something to fill the space... I really don't say that to be mean, trust me. Anyway, not to be totally a stick in the mud and ruin anyone's spirits, because I know how stupid it really is to go on and on about something like that, I just wanted to give you some advice :) I really do love this story by the way and I hope that despite the whole, Zak really liking Nikki and not Abrielle, that they will end up together because that Walmart chapter was soooo cute! They almost kissed! sooo update again soon! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice chapter, I like how you presented all the different POVs, and hooray for Jason and Allie. Now we just need Zack and Abrielle. Keep up the good work. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() WOOHOO! GO COLE! I'm really liking the Cole Abrielle pairing! I think it's adorable. Zach seems a little too dense at the moment hahahahaha Nikki is just . . . annoying :P Ahhhhh Jason and Allie, it's really about time! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I so hope zack and abrielle go out 3 |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hell ya someone is getting hurt. And it's not Jason that sounds like an ass. It's Zack. Well, maybe not to most, but to me he is. I just hope Abri will be the one who WON'T get hurt. She's too nice. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I thought he was going to kiss her! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aww he likes her! |