|Reviews for Leanna as an embankment and Ophelia as a moat|
| SmashedIce.X chapter 1 . 6/7/2011
This was just brilliant, I can't believe more people haven't reviewed this! I've only read a couple of your poems, but they're so good I want to try and read more, a mammoth task however with over 700 pieces up here! :)
| account inactive00000 chapter 1 . 4/2/2011
"water is always wiser than us." LOVE that line, very striking and the linebreak really helps it stand out, I love the idea of it and how the poem sort of builds itself around that statement. Very, very well done, I love the way water flows (ah bad pun) through this poem.
Only issue- in the second-to-last stanza, there's just a tiny tense issue with "tried". Should be "tries" to fit in with the other verbs, but otherwise, perfectly fine. This is a good poem