Reviews for The Omni Improv
Inkspilled chapter 1 . 4/7/2011
I really liked this, the rhythm and rhyming gave it a very folk-tale/fairy tale type of feel. The ending was cleverly done, I really enjoyed that. Also, the style was consistent throughout, really very nicely done. It's got such an easy to read mood and the first two lines really capture your attention. Great work! :)
Caracol39 chapter 1 . 4/6/2011
This is a great poem. I love the imagery, especially in the fourth stanza. "They could see their vast expanse under an exponential glow" and "spitting out the feathers of ten thousand years of fluff" are my favorite lines-the first one adds to the surreal atmosphere of the poem and the second is a vivid metaphor that stood out to me as I was reading.

The only critique I have is that in the fifth stanza, the last line doesn't quite flow as well as the others. But that's really a minor detail.

Overall, great work! This is the first of your compositions that I have read, and I'm adding it to my favorites.