Reviews for Not The One |
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![]() ![]() Saw that you reviewed something of mine(Trash to Treasure), so I'm here to return the favor! Cause I'm cool like that. You have the skill to make this better- I know- so use it! Towards the ending where she proclaims her love, it's a bit overly cliche. Too long too. Keep it short and simple. How long do our conversations last? How long does somebody speak without being interrupted? You could do that actually; make him interupt her with a 'but I love her.' or something like that. Awkward sentence that I noticed: Hardly ever would I be in such situations again, but they all happened, it wasn't and impossibility. felt a bit weird.. Keep writing! ~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() i just don't know what to say i am, for one speechless. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is awesome! It's so sad, but beautiful at the same time. Nicely done. You're brilliant, love! |